When I close my eyes and think of you,
I find it hard to breathe.
I search for your face to see your smile,
but before it comes you leave.
My tears they fall upon my cheeks,
they flow like a flooding rain.
My heart beats so painfully,
I'll never be the same.
I search for complete happiness,
it's something I can't feel.
I'm missing a big part of myself,
my feelings are not real.
I'll continue to walk throughout my life,
as if I know the way.
Loving each moment I spent with you,
and for strength I will pray.
Author notes
In memory of my daddy and ten year old niece.
Written August 20th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- by Sammers.
300 points, ended January 28, 2004, 77 entries
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I'm spreading a passion For the gospel...
it's under Myspace actually..it's like an online church
this was our service today
http://www.desiringgod.org/ResourceLibrary/MediaPlayer/4157/Video/
Do you have a myspace..?
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A lovely tribute...
A lovely tribute; thankfully, the memories of loved ones remain in our hearts, as we're forced to move on without their presence; nicely written. --Joe
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You write well in verse, and touch hearts, this is what being a poet is all about. And to share your faith is a true blessing sent from God.
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You are truly talented i like this its beautiful partly because it has my screen name in it partly because im a christian by the way the spaces in this comment are due to my horribl etyping skills not to be annoying very emotional piece
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Talented is what you are, and i hope that you know that. You get your emotions across very clearly as if you are speaking to someone directly and we can feel what you are feeling. Keep up the great work!
Amber
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You are truly talented!! I also want to thank you for sharing your faith through your poetry.
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awww...i like this its so beautiful...awww
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lol thank you...can't believe I missed that.
Sam
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Dear Samplette~
Regarding my poem Inside Forever -- I don't know the form to be honest...I thinkk I just counted down to one...I think Karen(Kalexi) showed me. I've learned alot from her, she's such a beautiful soul
Your poem: I'll Never Be The Same
Awesome as always! You always put so much emotion into your pieces! Jam packed with them...I only spotted one typo...in the beginning when you said "stream down my check" I think you ment cheek Beautiful piece my friend!
Always an ^j^Honesty
Be Safe & Be Warm
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Wow. I'm speechless. (for once). great write.
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This was so beautiful Sam. Like I'd expect anything less from you! I love the way you have so many different forms of poetic excellence. I truly enjoy experiencing all of it.
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wow this is really amazing! i'm glad you wrote/posted it..it's such a wonderful write
keep it up
kiddo
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sad but good
This is a great write Sam, makes me sense you have had some teary times in your life to. You have not given me much about you, which thing I hate, but I know you are very sensitive and loving.
I so appreciate your comment on First Kiss. I was so shy as a boy, still am but not quite so much. Thanks darlin', jean -
The emptiness affected me. A search for answers that you can't find. Very good read.. Thank you
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Hi Sam, good job you have done with this poem. I can almost feel your pain. Thanks so much for reading my poem also, such heartfelt words make a difference.
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great!!!!
wow excellent, every word spoke directly to me and what im dealing with. very enjoyable.I totally feel what you write!!!
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