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Cycle

A drop of inspiration in my mind
  crawls slowly through the fissures in my head
to meet another drop and then, combined,
  each wiggles where the other thought has led.

A trickle of imagination flows,
  a rivulet of rhythm in my brain.
It makes a deep impression as it goes
  across the coarse and spare synaptic plain.

Then several currents suddenly converge;
  the channel deepens, widens in its course
until it must break free, a mighty surge,
  a verbal torrent, unrelenting force.

And once the flood has peaked, I'm left to drain,
Till drops of inspiration form again.

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Contest with an emphasis on metaphor.

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    October 12

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    The creativity of an artist is read in these impressive lines...Your imagery and deep thought put into this penning make this a welcome and delightful read! as well as the flow and rhyme. Keep penning!


  • Ellis gold member
    July 26

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    Holy Macaroni Marconi!
    Sounds like you got radio waves in your head!
    I don't believe that; I think you're a phony
    or else you are already dead.

    Yes.

    Tiki Cat
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    "Too Good For Humans"



  • Justified Inc.
    February 2

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    Simply Amazing...

    I have no words. I am truly in awe.
    I loved this. I feel like an idiot because I cannot describe how this poem made me feel. I am so silly, I know. It felt like I was reading a masterpiece. So refined, precise and perfected down to every syllable and word. Like a puzzle that has been all put together piece by piece, revealing a beautiful image. Yet I can still see the shapes of the intersecting pieces, faintly revealing the work of the "puzzler." There, I tried. It made my heart beat faster!
    Truly,
    Annette
    Bravo!


  • Mirthryl
    June 17, 2008

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    Appropriate title. Excellent metaphor describing inspiration. Absolutely love the imagery of "the coarse and spare synaptic plain!" Very nice use of the sonnet form, well rhymed.
    The wording choice gives the effect of a small, quiet start, picking up strength and speed in the following stanzas, until it strikes the senses as "a verbal torrent, unrelenting force."
    Love the observation of the concluding couplet, for often it seems to take a quantity of time to 'recharge' the creative battery.


  • Room without doors gold member
    July 4, 2007

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    Outstanding

    This poem scores highly on flow, meter and rhyme and I thought the metaphor for inspiration was excellent. This poem is sophisticated and thoughtful. Thank you for entering the contest.

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