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Drift wood

My mind drifts with this rotted piece of wood,
with the plastic pop bottles in the swirls of bluish sea,
the ocean floor littered with soils of man.
All death must go somewhere,

the dead soldiers of sex,

thrown down the toilet and washed away,

the dead debris of the youth,

failing to find somewhere else to go,

landing on the sandy beaches.

The fallen warriors of man made torture,

fallen into sandy grasps,

it all must come to an end.

Plastic and tin corpses,

becoming land-mines in this mess of sand.

"Everything in the world,

seems to drift towards the sea,

and usually ends up,

on the beach somewhere".

Somewhere a where

for a who with no name.

Rotting and decaying in the salty crevices.

Floating into eternity,

with a reminiscence of the sand bound land at hand.

We are the fallen.

 

 

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  • zt
    July 17, 2007
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    I like this take on the thought option you chose. You paint a gloomy picture, but then again we are the ones painting this picture with our poor methods of litter disposal. I would add that there is one more typo in L7: you want "debris". Good luck in the contest!


  • Touchof1der silver member
    July 4, 2007
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    One minor spelling error here... In the 9th line... "landing on the sandy beachs"... should be [BEACHES].

    That aside... let me say that I enjoyed the train of thought you introduced here and the imagery that brought it all to life within the mind's eye. Nicely done! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
    ♥ Touchof1der