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Bubbling Crude

Marching and murder,
infiltration and destruction.
Whatever it takes,
it will be ours.
Whoever it costs us,
they are expendable;
passed pawns to be promoted to
barrels of oil.

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My prewrite is Fuliginous. Thanks.

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  • Aurora Ceres
    August 25, 2007

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    Simply stated, and powerfully poignant. Well done. I wish you all the best in this contest.

    Bella


  • Beating gold member
    August 23, 2007

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    oh. This is really good. You say so much with so little words without really forcing your belief on others. I like that. And I agree with you. Strong piece!


  • grannyeri gold member
    July 15, 2007

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    Yes, oil certainly is a pawn in the battle for world supremecy and power. Consequences of wanting and having and fighting for this are not pretty. Easy to read and understand what's being said.


  • Nam
    July 12, 2007

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    You say so much in very few words. Sometimes that's enough for certain pieces but of this piece it seems you're saying more than what you're actually saying about war, politics, terrorism, etc., yet not really expanding on it any further than just mentioning: war, politics, terrorism etc.,

    If that makes sense to you.

    I think more could be done with this piece. As is: you're just mentioning what's been argued countless times and not really bringing anything further to it, in a "poetic" sense. It seems nonsensical.

    -Nam


    • Cool.Indifference
      July 13, 2007
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      I appreciate you taking the time to comment on this. Yes, I understand what you mean, but honestly, I don't think this piece was that poorly done. That's just my personal opinion. So, I thank you for the comment, and will look at the piece again from your view; if I see anything I can add, I will be sure to do so.

      TwT


  • Jamais Oublier
    July 5, 2007

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    wow....

    just like many things you write...
    i love this.
    you have a way of making me dead speechless.
    yep yep... thats what you do.

    ♥ dyei


  • fatizeh
    July 5, 2007
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    this is so true mann...i loved it!


  • Estatic over him
    July 4, 2007

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    hey this is good. i like this. i kinda of understand a little bit more into detail. this was really good.


  • Mainzy
    July 3, 2007
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    very dark piece here, but true and beautiful with every word. Well done!!

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