She's the one that I run to
Whenever I am in need
She rubs my head
To make me feel at ease
Her smile melts my heart
Her eyes make me smile
I love the way she loves
The way she makes someone feel
She puts everyone in front of herself
Her health is not in good condition
Yet she's so full of life
She is all she needs to be
And more then you can see
She will put a smile on your face
The second she walks through the door
She hugs you with all her might
Not wanting to let go
If you knew the woman
That I am describing
You would love her to pieces
She puts so much of herself
Into someone else
She loves with all her might
And never anything less
This person; My mother
Author notes
BlkVampiress - Poem 2 New Write
My mother is dying of lung cancer/diabetes ... she is a very loving person ... and she loves with everything she has left in her ... every person she meets loves her to pieces ... And I'm sure if you met her ... you would too ... Thank god for a mother so sweet ... so loving ... so cute ... and so AMAZING ... I LOVE YOU MOM ... please everyone who reads this ... will you pray for her ... she is an amazing person ... and she would love to have as much prayer as possible ... thank you
A contest entry
- [CONTEST] Round 1; Intriguing Personas, Impacted Lives by MissPennyLane.
300 points, ended September 20, 2007, 37 entries
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I'm so sorry to hear of your mom. Wonderfully written and deeply touching. I wish you all the best in this contest.
Bella
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"Her health is not in good condition
Yet she's so full of life"
I love that line - it's a contradiction, but still I know what you mean. Being full of life has nothing to do with health. It's the spirit of a person, and I love how you put that together.
One thing. In the line:
"And more then you can see"
It should be "than" and not "then" -
This is beautiful and a wonderful tribute to your mother. Well done. You had me in tears, so much love poured into this write. Good luck.
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Well written, heartfelt and emotional piece that is easy to read and understand. Flows well and universal topic.
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I really like this
You use such simple everyday words and ideas to produce a very moving poem. I like the line "she is all that she needs to be and more than you can see".
As you are a poetess I know you will be strong for her.
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emotional
that is a very sweet emotional poem about your mother. i can feel the love you have for her by reading what you have written.
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emotional
my grandmaw is going through this right now.....i no she doesnt have much time left she has so many problems i cant even name them all.....i no how it feels to have a family member dieing....i will pray for your mom this is a vary good poem and im glad to be in your ap family thx
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POWERFUL...
i love this write it is so deep so personal, and you have written it so well, i can feel your emotions through this piece... i understand exactly what your saying here... my bestfriend i've known her sence she was 2 months old,lost her dad wen she was young, then her mom, the woman that has raised me, got diagnosed with ms she has been dying from it for many years now but, she still lightens everyones day around her, she can always make you smile and shes always there for you no matter what you need her for shes there because she loves all... this write was amazing and showed thoes emotions well... im sure i would love your mom if ever to meet her... tell her that i will be praying for her...
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Very powerful. Only one error, but it's so miniscule it doesn't detract from the poem. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to your mom.
TwT
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