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shadows sighing

 

alone

in world of bereft belief,

i tremble secret wishes wanton

 

for one to share my soul,

in whole

 

as picture painted pigment swirled

upon my heart,

of canvas, starry

 

where truth is shared

in cell of body, buried breath

bequeathed in banter

 

ground in dust

of melded viewpoint, vying veils

of shadows, sighing

 

 

 

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  • Peteskid gold member
    July 13, 2007

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    a spiritual quality here longing and wanting for a part to be filled, very expressive and strong writing here; very well done...PK

  • tara wilson gold member
    July 6, 2007

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    "ground in dust
    of melded viewpoint, vying veils
    of shadows, sighing"
    What I like about your poetry is that it IS imagery...thank you so much...I see shadows sighing for light here My interpretation...lol

    Thank you for your entry


  • grannyeri gold member
    July 5, 2007

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    Great alliteration in these lines, good flow and images conveyed through these words used. Emtpiness, alone portrayed well in these lines.


  • Oisin silver member
    July 5, 2007
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    A very intense look at loneliness and and artist searching for form, Very nicely done.


  • japan
    July 3, 2007

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    The thing I loved about this poem was the sounds given by the words/wording you chose. Almost lyrical. This is beautiful.

    "for one to share my soul"

    Dont we all.
    I enjoyed reading and liked the imagery. Intriguing write

    japan

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