Captivated by her beauty I stood in awe at her presence,
Even as she was falling into her self-destruction
She held the charm of a nymph,
Drifting lost in her eyes of measured oceans
I could see her courting death,
Becoming drunk on the idea of making death her life partner,
Her torment worn like tattered rags of fine garments,
My animal lust longed to lay down with her,
But there was so much more to her than that,
Like a crafted jig-saw puzzle scattered across the room,
I longed to arrange every piece,
See the picture as a whole,
With each new door opened to her soul,
I found her beautifully tragic,
How this angelic creature was tortured
I understood her desire to fade to blank,
I would make her my religion
Sacrifice for her daily,
Worship her like the Goddess of my desires in which she is,
Make relics of her discards,
Have blind faith,
follow her to the ends of the earth,
Like a faithful minion I will give her what she decrees
I will, for the love of her,
Asphyxiate the dream I have been waiting for.
I will be her dark angel of death,
A contest entry
- DEATH YOU ARE DEAD by Purush.
600 points, ended July 28, 2007, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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A beautifully written poem! great write! I loved the way you started it "Captivated by her beauty I stood in awe at her presence,
Even as she was falling into her self-destruction
She held the charm of a nymph, " amazing! Thank you so much for entering! Excellent work and the best of luck in my contest!!
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wow, i like this poem, i think that it was amazing and captivating from the first paragraph. I found it to be pretty for some reason.
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very nice ....great great write!
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Spectacular
Words of a real poet. I bow to you
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neatly crafted poem
This poem is neatly crafted with chosen words finding appropriate places. thank you for participation
i wish you all the best
some lines linger in me
"would make her my religion
Sacrifice for her daily,
Worship her like the Goddess of my desires in which she is,
Make relics of her discards,
Have blind faith,
follow her to the ends of the earth"'
with good greets
purush
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Very good write. I think it could have been darker. It's very good, in that, it goes through the darkness in someones mind OVER love. Not with love. But nonetheless, it is still good, and stands a good chance...
Thank you for entering, and good luck
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thanks for following instruction. this was a passible cool read its like you gave me a taste of death then you took the seasoning out my mouth leaving a bitter taste in my mouth. dont ever ever do this to a reader always make the flavor suck they fingers cause the lyrics are so good. this was a okay piece ~ lady enthralling ~
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