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Transistors and Tubes

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Transistors and Tubes

now women are like transistors
and men are just like tubes
and women can be like sisters
and men will act like boobs
men are simple, women complex
women see men as big red necks
men are simple
men are simple
men see women as sex objects

so now women are transistors
girls are multitasking
being smarter than the misters
thank you just for asking
women are true and love their man
loving him, as much as she can
women are true
women are true
it’s been this way since time began

here’s the reason, men are like tubes
they will forget her mind
talk to her heart but watch her boobs
thinking of her behind
men can’t devote their heart to one
they’ll run around and just have fun
men can’t devote
men can’t devote
I still love that son of a gun

 

 

 

Author notes

Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 syllables of line five /c

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  • Harlequin Dance
    September 25, 2008
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    Hah. Nice poem. The ending is just perfect


  • thelovesongwriter
    July 9, 2007

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    this is a great poem! very creative and intellectual with a splot of humor inside! great write and best of luck!


  • Swan song gold member
    July 8, 2007

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    That is very funny and yet so true. Can't help it at heart level there are boobs and behind boobs well you know. I loved this poem.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    July 6, 2007
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    A little good natured ribbing never hurts...love this to pieces.


  • Lauren Alexandra
    July 5, 2007

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    So brilliant! So true!

    This is a wonderful poem filled to the brim with such satire and wit! In the end it is all about loving each other no matter what we do or who we are!


  • Desire gold member
    July 4, 2007

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    OMG!!

    How in the world of transistors did I miss this one~
    I look on my list daily
    Holy Moly...


    This is ONE POWERFULLY FUNNY piece which has me rolling on the floor like a tube
    Loved this!
    You are so darn witty


    Love the boobs reference
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    July 3, 2007

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    Everything about this poem is perfect... except the content. I see a poetry war in the offing. Put on your helmets and stockpile metaphors... IT'S ON!

    Three bunniees for this masterpiece. And a kiss.


  • PoetsAngel
    July 3, 2007

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    Thank you for starting my day with a giggle...this is wonderful Amera, and often so true of the lesser sex (I'll cop crap for that line)

    Cathy♥


  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 3, 2007

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    Amera, well, you and Diana are certainly in that catagory without a doubt. Very nicely done with great touch of humor.



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  • bedovich
    July 3, 2007

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    yayyy great work sis i love this alotssss


  • PerVirtuous
    July 3, 2007
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    I will be back to comment when I finally stop laughing...


  • Hetha gold member
    July 3, 2007

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    This is new and different! Metaphorically it is just right, and the form was well chosen for the piece. The picture is too cute! The font is perfect, and your lowercase form, adds the right quirkiness overall. Great job! Good luck in the contest!

    ~Hetha


    • Amera gold member
      July 3, 2007
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      Thanks Bloody Bess. I love your comments. Thanks for the bunnies too.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • grannyeri gold member
    July 3, 2007

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    liked the flow and the message you send in these lines - liked the font you used as well - something different than the one used on this site. Must be a cut and paste that you do to get this. Will have to try that one day. Liked that last line too - cute!


  • RedAquarius
    July 3, 2007

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    I got a good giggle out of this, this form really flows nicely and fits the humor I think - has a light, speedy flow! Good luck in the contest.


  • Cant-touch-this
    July 3, 2007

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    This is just to much little sister you are just so wise pegged those men right on the head...both of themThanks for the smile


  • Whoochi gold member
    July 3, 2007

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    LMAO, loved this DOLLFACE...what a splendid perspective...and of course, form is always impeccable...Good luck!

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