Thought
Explanation
Conflict
Decision
Implementation
Doubt
Failure
Recrimination
Depression
Denial
Desperation
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Thought....
Welcome to MY world
3/7/07
A contest entry
- Pre-write Party [Why not?] by DancingRed.
300 points, ended September 26, 2007, 53 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Too short and not enough description for me to like it all that much, srry.
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Thank you. It is very much a short, minimalist piece, as that was the intention, to leave it open to the mind of the reader, to paint a picture of my thought process without going on and on and on and boring people to death like I usually do. To leave it stark, barren, but using a wordchoice that is definative.
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Yes, this piece is powerful in it's brevity, and the short lines give a short & sharp feel, but I feel it's lacking a certain poetic air I find in other pieces. I'm not too sure...
Thanks for entering.
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Thank you. Very true, it's not overly poetic this one, was more trying something stark, minimal, which suited the theme.
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