she breathes in me
opals and sweet pears'
nectar taste
of truths
and tomorrows
like the
surface
of the sun
she casts
shadows
of fire and memories
she is always in me~
her heart is
my heart lingered eagerly
they say lovers
never find
each other~
that we're
in each other
all along~
so much in words
so much in feelings~
truths and beauty
that I am her~
and she
is me
as fleeting~
no mystery~
no riddles to sell
only that love
is not magic
nor a dream or our potions~
only instead and in
turn, there is no such
remedy as fate
and nothing
as related~
the medicine is all within ourselves~
when
we've
stopped
and finally
we no longer~
just
listen
to
our own~
deep
wells
A contest entry
- Deeper Meaning by Jim.
300 points, ended March 30, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonder Filled...
Something nostalgic... something reminescent of past memories, maybe an unresolved issue of not having consummated the rendezvous with my soulmate in a past life... i dunno what it is - but thy poem, my friend, dost stir up a subtle yet powerful storm in my mind (and heart, of course!). Thy poem speaketh volumes. I like the way your poem opens. The first two lines may just be a fantastic example of your angels channeling the words through! Keep writing! Good luck and God bless
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Wow, I love the imagery and feeling in this.
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Very interesting. I have never read a poem written in this layout before.
I like the poem, and it does have a deeper meaning, but I am failing to see a story that it tells.
I could be wrong, and correct me if I am. If I'm not, then this doesn't quite fit the contest.
In either case, it is worthy of my applaud.
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The content and structure take the title to deeper realms...and the title is excellent.
I love the approach given...like innermost thoughts rising unbidden; that suddenly make everything so clear. Appreciate you sharing, Blue
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