Silently she whispers
she screams
on deaf winds carried swiftly away
by the current
Quietly she whispers
an indistinct sigh
of contentment
as rugged fingertips
trail naked flesh of the broken
as short-lived pleasures
leave her breathless
Shyly she whispers
a captivated moan
to the heavens
to the moon
as her soul becomes one
with the flavorless ripples
of the ocean
... and her wings give song to the diluted
Author notes
"She's a fingertip's swirl in an ocean"...
A contest entry
- She's a fingertip's swirl in an ocean... by tara wilson.
900 points, ended July 13, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You know...I never liked this one the first read through...now I'm sending it to the finals
Thank you
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I know that the manner in which I write is generally confusing and takes more than a fleeting glance to read. I'm glad you came back and reread it, even if you didn't like it. I take constructive criticism well so you needn't worry about hurting my feelings. Just tell me what was wrong.
Much love,
Jessica
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