i'm listening to her words;;
watching the whispers sift
s l o w l y
thru the air;;
i can catch each phrase && sound
i'm watching her lips;;
i just feel so tempted
with.the.intimacy.of.the.moment
to breathe her words
&& feel her skin
her eyes sparkle melancholy;;
filled with tears
so i hush my lust
STOP
regain composure --
((hide my secret still))
distant stare of no,, no,, no,,
she's in the moment
[[burnt in memory]]
i was there too
i tried to think so
her smile is missing
she can see me lie
my body's slowdancing
s l o w l y
she's gone already
before i could say goodbye
Author notes
This is the first time I've written dirty pretty. I hope the form is true to it's style.
Whisper
Sparkle
Secret
Burn
Lie
Slowdance
Your Heart Is My Symphony
A contest entry
- && I'd rather have a b r u i s e d pelvis;; than a //sha tte red\\ ♥ by PaintedParisPassion.
500 points, ended July 19, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is beautiful
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I never thought someone could capture such a gossamer moment, or build up such a delicate thing as this, ever, until I read this. Great, good, wonderful job.
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Ok...omg. you're just sooo awesome, you're the first person to enter a new write, and its really not bad for your first dirty pretty write, really, i liked it, you've got alot of potential!!!
distant stare of no,, no,, no,,
she's in the moment
[[burnt in memory]]
i was there too
i tried to think so
^^^i liked that the best!!
Thanks for entereing, good luck, and keep writing!!!
:]
xLovesxTragedyx
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