We were on course heading east
Then were suddenly in action
High above the clouds,
When canon-fire pierced our armour,
The port wing began to dip.
A starboard engine faltered
As flames began to grow.
We faced our doom together
Clipped on chutes and went.
Landed in a forest glade
It looked cool and green.
Established our direction
Moss grows on the north of trees.
The stars came out like jewels
Lighting our path west.
Tore our clothes on brambles
As we struggled ever on
Wallowed in mud-water dykes
Crossed some railway lines.
We were young and eager
Looked for victory.
We heard a twig snap close
It broke the deadly quiet.
Lay underneath some bracken,
Until the swine had passed.
Determined not to be prisoners
Of this cruel regime.
A contest entry
- Word List - Free Verse Only by LadyUnique.
550 points, ended July 8, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a precious poem that makes me very glad, today. poignant and sweet, every line is a joy to read. you are a talented poet and i am so glad to read your work.
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this does put the reader right into a space in time... very nicely done
thank you for entering and best of luck
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Thank you, kind poet!
I am wisking this fine poem away to Poetry Planet this very moment! Readers the world over will enjoy it!
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A verty strong piece of writing, as one would expect, but it finishes too soon. The reader wants to know what happens next.
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You brought to life these tense moments of wartime. Always the realistic relater of these poems, in this one you've captured the fear/confidence of these young men... yourself included?
An excellent narration of this event
I wish you the best in the contest
Dee
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Oh, dear poet, Mr. Eslick, may I please post this fine poem on the poetry blog I run for a newspaper in California, USA?? You can find it at
blogcentral.thereporter.com/planet
We would love to have this for The Planet... a military poem is so grand.
Thank you very much, sir, for your poetry is truly FINE!
Melodies
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FANTASTIC TOLD STORY PIECE! And told with a nip of suspense. Well done.
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This is an awesome poem. It was like this was all happening in front of my eyes. I love poems like this. Enjoyed the read!!!
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