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Angels Tears (Villanelle)

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She was drunk the night she let her charge die.
Car accident, hit a pole while asleep.
Now sits with tarnished wings and wonders why.

She was a good Angel, did always at least try.
Now doubts assail her, questions do creep.
She was drunk the night she let her charge die.

Just a little wine she said, now she doth cry.
A moment of not watching, life becomes cheap.
Now sits with tarnished wings and wonders why.

She prays for forgiveness, she gets no reply.
The sadness inside her goes very deep.
She was drunk the night she let her charge die.

How could this have happened, things gone all awry.
Guilt, pain, consequences, on herself she does heap.
Now sits with tarnished wings and wonders why.

She cries Angel tears, to her charge says goodbye.
This is what happens to Angels unattended sheep.
She was drunk the night she let her charge die.
Now sits with tarnished wings and wonders why.










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Villanelle

A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming scheme:
aba aba aba aba aba abaa.

The first and the third lines in the first stanza are repeated in alternating order throughout the
poem, and appear together in the last couplet (last two lines).

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  • PoetsAngel
    July 15, 2007

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    I have read this twice before, both times I was moved to tears, which doesn't happen very often, and couldn't comment, again now I am teary, this is a beautiful sad piece, I am so glad you entered it and congrats on the HM.

    Cathy♥


    • Griswold gold member
      July 15, 2007

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      Cathy, I'm sorry to make you cry, I didnt intend it to be so deep when I started it, but God had other plans and it is the way it is. Best of luck to you and yours in all your endeavors...Scott


      • PoetsAngel
        July 15, 2007
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        Please Scott, don't ever be sorry for moving me to tears, be happy you touched me


  • Amera gold member
    July 14, 2007

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    This is so cool! I never expected a Villanelle in this type of contest. This is actually a very moving piece. Good luck in the contest.

    Love,
    Amera ♥


  • HeavenScent4U
    July 3, 2007

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    very cool picture
    good luck in the contest


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    July 3, 2007
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    oooooo i likey... its very effective
    good luck
    XxCharxX

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