Dear You,
The silence
that I
had
grown
to love
was
breaking
my
heart
Your big blue
eyes
never looked so
calm
As if they
were
finally at peace
That is the
reason why
it
crushed my everything
When
you
didn't
even
try
to
deny
her
The tears
came
almost as
fast
as the
Memories
I love yous
Kisses
Future
& Everything that meany anything
Went
Away
You asked if
we could still
be friends
My heart
wanted
to stab you
But my mouth said no
I didn't really want to see you leave
So I said if
you walk away now
don't ever come back
& I swear you quickened your pace
Come Back
Love,
Me
A contest entry
- contest: love letter by Diseased Mind.
3500 points, ended August 11, 2007, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Form and fit ...
BWTB, I am enamored with this piece. The form demonstrates the craziness of a heartfelt (almost ranting) verbal self-discussion that one might have in a circumstance such as this. The wording speaks to the pain, the torment of the emotions of the speaker. I believe you have done something really terrific here.
poet43


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wow, i liked that, and totally have had this happen. sorta. but i really liked this, and idk just the way it was written just made me want to keep reading... great write.. good luck in that contest

