She sits at the desk,
A most modern desk.
With back perfectly straight, or slouched like a stump.
But she sits and she writes.
As i have seen no other.
she cozies into the corner,
The corner of the couch,
A couch that seems quite comfortable,
as she frustrates over a piece of paper.
She listens to music,
the God fearing noise.
And seems to "mediate" on that which is the floor.
She closes her eyes and hums right along,
Than picks up the pad once more,
And starts to scribble once again.
For the Gods only know what they have put into that head of hers
That makes her seem so agile.
But she just seems content to sit and be comforted
At what she has to write.
For this is what i see every time she comes to write.
For this is what i observe, when she comes through that door.
That of a fair maiden, trying her best.
At a language and verse of which is not of herself.
But a woman that which can be sedated by the poems of romance.
Author notes
option 9 for THE BIGGEST OPTION CONTEST YOU WILL EVER SEE
A contest entry
- the room i write in by truembrace.
600 points, ended July 20, 2007, 14 entries
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600 points, ended August 12, 2007, 41 entries
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Comments
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this is really a solid poem as far as giving us vivid details. I think with some of the repetition of thought, it could have been a bit more tight - despite the style was to stress some images, perhaps give them clarification.
it really is a crystal clear picture of the "she" that comes to write.
this is well written and a very nice entry for the contest. thanks so much for entering.
Kim -
a very unique perspective of a simple room. I really like the last line, so much is said, and yet unsaid, in that one little phrase. Great write, here. I like it.
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I like the voice of the room it has a flow that uplifts the heart. It sounds like a nice room. I am glad that you have wrote about your process. Each person has there own way of writing. The hardest part is for me coming with my routine or space for writing. This is wrote very well.Overall a delightful write full of imagery.
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wow holly this was a great poem filled with happyness but it has the feeling of sad in it to i have no idea why though you put so much imagry you are a great poet and a great friend thanks for sharing and god bless you forever and always love your cousin dianna lee green also knowned as serenity lynn silvermoon keep up the great work and have fun in all you do
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