Define : Love
4. a profoundly tender, passionate affection for another person.
I've seen you pass day after day,
With not a look that comes my way.
There's no regard if I am there,
But in the end, it's me who cares.
Attraction is too small a word,
For feelings that are so absurd,
Stripped of logic or common sense,
The flame in me is too intense.
A sketch of you carved in my mind.
Dreams and illusions both combined.
Lost in my thoughts that aren't real,
So my emotions remain concealed.
Define : Love
3. sexual passion or desire.
I've seen you pass day after day,
The image etched won't go away.
I long, I thirst to feel your skin,
And explore everything within.
The love for you is growing strong,
Making my pleasure feel so wrong.
A touch, a kiss, that's what I crave,
So when you're near, I can't behave.
Obsession will not define this.
The words just won't explain the bliss,
Of passion that burns deep in me.
Please, my love, accept my plea.
Define : Love
2. to need or require.
I've seen you pass day after day.
All that I claim may sound cliche,
But love does that to one and all,
And once you're in, you are enthralled.
Addiction would not clarify,
Why all this time I still would try,
To have you only to myself,
And to belong to you as well.
There's no limit to what I'd do,
I'd gift myself to give to you.
There's nothing left if you leave me,
Cause without you, it's hard to breathe.
Define : Love
1. You
Author notes
-Dedicated to my first love-
(Hun, don't even flatter yourself, it was all forced)
I have to say, this is one of my hardest poems.
The definitions are taken from www.dictionary.com
Except for Definition #1.
A contest entry
- what is love by wolfpuppy.
400 points, ended May 22, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Loooove! :) :) :) by jamesbliss.
459 points, ended April 15, 147 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I love the poem, its wonderful I am a little reluctant to give it another trophy though just because it has already been appreciated. Good write!
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This is so bloody awesome. You did such a great job.
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This is beautiful. I actually rlly like the definitions. I think it is a nice, unique addition to the poem. Lovely flow..I understand that it was forced
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asome ur in dfantly
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I could have done without the definitions it took away from the write in my opinion. Beautifully done none less.
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This is such a beautiful piece.. Brilliant write.. I really enjoyed the "-[ Define : Love ]-" parts.. especially "1. You" it really adds some creativity to the write.. Thank you for entering.. Lots of luck!
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well congrats on all the trophies! well deserved! i have never read anything like it be for! good job! thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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it's beautiful. I love how it ends with the definition of love being "You." What a great ending you came up with. I truly enjoyed it. The rhyme and flow were excellent. The only place i noticed where the flow seemed off was
Obsession will not define this.
The words just won't explain the bliss,
I just had trouble rolling that off the tongue. Other than that, it was very good!
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wow this was wonderful... a shame it was forced.... if you can get such a great write out of something that was forced i would love to see what you can do otherwise.
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I don't think I want to be able to do otherwise...
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Ok, I adored it. The last definition especially. Wow. Amazing write.
Thanks for entering!
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very sweet!
This is a very sweet poem you've written here! i like the last definition "1. You". a very well written piece!!!
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OMG OMG OMG!!!!!! I LOVE THIS POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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This was good I enjoyed reading it... good job.. and GOOD LUCK!!!
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Well one of your firsts or not ... this was absolutely gorgeous ... I am so amazed at this piece ... The definitions put everything together ... it was simply amazing ... yuo have penned a piece of heaven with this one ... thank you so much for sharing it with us ... for it was so lovely ... thank you for your entry and good luck int he contest ... much love to ya!
Chantelle
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Whoaa! This is awesome! I don't know how else to explain it!
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Hood-Winked!
Such a wonderful format and very unique. Such wonderful emotions and imagery. Just amazing as always
You have just been Hood-Winked courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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This poem was pretty good for a love poem... there were a couple things that threw me off though, for example:
"To have you only to myself,
And to belong to you as well."
"well" and "myself" do not rhyme so it kinda got me lost there. Other than that, good poem. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. -
this is GREAT! absolutely great!
i really like the way you wrote this, the rhyme scheme, the format--
it's phenomenal!
good luck!
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Nice set up here. Nice poem, describes a crush more than real love, I think.
Congrats on the silver!
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hmm, you may be true saying that it describes a crush more. Love is definately not my type of poetry. But I wrote this after a break-up, so it really does feel like loving him is wrong - as he doesn't care about me anymore.
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It's a poetry class here at AP on meter and how to use it in poetry. Meter is a rhythm made up of the stresses of words. Do check it out if you can. I took it a little over a year ago and really noticed and improvement in my writing afterwards.
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A very neat format. I liked the concept of this. And it was enjoyable. I have the same thoughts here about your meter though. I think you probably wrote this without thinking of meter and just sort of wrote it to flow. It's how I used to write before I knew about meter. Anyway, I think you ought to check out Corey Harvard's metrics class. It's really good and you could definently write some great stuff and improve all stuff with some perfect meter.
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I'm sorry, but what exactly is Corey Harvard's metrics class? I'd be more than glad to check it out, but lol, I don't even know what it is
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What a treat, 3 poems in one!!Excellent wrie! Thanks for entering and good luck!
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All was well until the last poem. The rhyming comes across as forced and doesn't mesh well, to be honest. 3,4,7,8,11,12 are the lines that really stick out to me. Only becuase I love rhyme and it is not always an easy thing to pull off, especially in longer pieces. Please, do not get me wrong, I very much enjoyed but truly feel some adjustments to those lines would do this piece even more good. Overall though, enjoyed very much.
Bella
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No, I don't get you wrong at all. It's all a matter of personal preferance. Although, since you feel that some adjustments should be made ... I was wondering if you could help me in that in order to improve the write.
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I would love to help. Perhpas you could messege me when you are on next, then we can duscuss it. Thank you for recieving my opinion with grace.
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I love the ending, very beautiful. It's a different style, very unique. You bring a lot of meaning into this and add a personal touch to it. You eally made me believe.
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hmm. well I normally dont like rhyming, but in this case its alright. everything seems to be good. It is very well written over all so i shall give you a 9 of 10
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Wow
This is beatuiful. Very beautiful. I love the creative way you started each new stanza with another definition. This is very unique and I really enjoyed this. Very deep and moving. I love it. Thanks for sharing! -
This is such a beautiful poem. I like your defintion of love. I know what it is like to like someone and not be able to get your feelings out. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Love can mean so many different things to so many different people that it is hard to find one exact definition that fits all scenarios. However, you have once again amazed me with the passion, truth, and raw emotion that you show in this piece, as with all your pieces. You have an amazing talent! Excellent work!
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one thing to say: I'm BOOKMARKING THIS! (you wouldn't guess you struggled so much to write it)
awesome write
thank you.
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lol ... Trust me, the amount I stuggled with this .. *sigh*
All the best to you in the judging
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Not forced at all
and this is now my new favorite of yours.
You have more talent then you know what to do with.
Excellent piece, Sweet Heart
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Love You Very Much
Granny
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It's nice to see something happy from you, even though it's forced. It really doesn't even seem like it is. I really loved this. Great job, like always and good luck.
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Oh, and good luck in the contest! xxx
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This is incredibly amazing as always! I love (smirks at realising he has used the word love) the way you've set it out, especially that last definition, it's just brilliantly done. It flows really nicely and the rhyme is excellent. You continue to enthrall and amaze me at what you can come up with. I hope you're ok, have you had your prom yet? If so, how was it!! Take care of youself big sis, lots of love and hugs, you're one and only crazy loveable little brother (well I think it's one and only!) x adios! x
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I cant believe that this was force, it was to well written for that, but wow, I love your style of writing,it is all way awesome
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Wow this is forced Cant wait to read when your feeling right and in the mood. I'll say this its great writing. Hope you feel better soon cause I do really like your writing and will read more.
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I'm afraid that I really REALLY hope I don't ever have to have the real emotions to back this up..
Thank you
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wow. i really like this. it would be PERFECT as a song!i even found myself kind of singing along to it...hehe....but anyways nice write i really liked it!
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