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At The Beach...

Parasols in Paradise,
entice lovers to partake
Beneath a sunlit rendezvous,
shrouded in its shade

Canopies clamor clearly,
as passions pure report
Proclaiming for its concupiscence
a haven for their hearts

Umbrellas unbridled,
across the sands of time..
Remembering the warm entreat,
beneath... was sublime

 

 

 

 

 

 


Author notes

AP Poet: PageTurner.

Photography by Todd Gipstein.

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  • aboomer silver member
    May 2, 2008

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    I like the melodic feel of this....and like your wording 'parasols of paradise''across the sands of time'....gives me a nice image of a beach somewhere (which I would LOVE to be on right now!!).
    thank you for your entry
    best wishes


  • X iMPERFECTiON x
    November 14, 2007
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    very nice and descriptive! good luck =]


  • kIrst1
    November 14, 2007
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    Great

    Great flow, great words and meaning. like it

  • Virgoan
    September 5, 2007

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    I am really in awe and my breath is still as I read the lines. I like how you move the words into a certain trance. The flow is perfect! Love this so much.

    Thanks for sharing my friend


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    August 19, 2007

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    ah, so you were theones all umbrella'd over on that beach this was delightful, pen friend.


  • crimsondew
    August 15, 2007
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    Lovely photo with lovelier words to follow...
    Beautiful words here..
    All the very best!


  • Aodes
    August 13, 2007

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    lolz....splendid sensuality. Some what suggestive

    haha...It's very well written (=

    It feels as though love "stolen" under the the gleaming sunlight could be made so innocent under the shade of an umbrella

  • Mercury Rising
    July 7, 2007

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    A really marvelous metaphor for sheltering love shared
    beneath the beach-tree of the beautiful umbrella. Best of luck in the contest with this wonderful poem.

    D.D.M.


  • Nicolette gold member
    July 3, 2007

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    Such a lovely flow about this poem and the words fall so smoothly on the ears. Loved the touches of alliteration too - you definately know how to apply that poetic device. The opening lines are magical and the visuals truly lovely. Loved the sense of warmth one gets from reading this poem. Lovely poetry.

    Thank you for posting it in my contest.

    ~ Nicolette


  • tara wilson gold member
    July 3, 2007

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    "Parasols of Paradise,
    entice lovers to partake."
    Oh, I love those opening lines...so beautiful this poem is

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