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spoiled children

 

spoiled children

rape

torture

 

Mother

 

seeking

absolution

sold on Sunday

 

 

 

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  • omega13
    July 12, 2007
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    sometimes I wonder how much I could get for mine too


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    July 3, 2007

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    Such an excellent metaphorical encapsulization of the human condition and our sell out relationship with our host, we feed like fleas upon the back of Gaia, drawing out her life blood, hoping lip service to remorse and occasional good intent will save us. Well done!
    xxoo
    dk


  • luckynsincere
    July 2, 2007

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    This is the kind of power I was looking for here. You jumped in. You went where the words led you. I am impressed, and you know that is not an easy task Well done. Your score from me is: 100


  • Arkbear gold member
    July 2, 2007

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    Damn!!!!

    Wolfy ~

     

    You are pulling out allll the stops in this Round ~

     

    This is SPLENDID!

     

    The message sends goosebumps ~

     

    The Presentation is creative and defined ~

     

    Your grammatical choices have been chosen well ~

     

    I think this is in the top 3 or 4 writes for me ~

     

    The Title could use a bit a Metaphoric

     help.....as you have already mentioned it just an

    inch away in your few 10 words you had to play with ~

     

    Other than that.....Superb job ~

     

    Bear ~

     

    99.7