Leaning over the edge
lost in kaliediscope thoughts
Dazed. Pre-occupied.
Shocked
Staring down to see
it suddenly drop, slip
from my fingers
Carelessly.
With mounted fear
and churching stomache
watching where it lands
On the ground beside your feet
Scooped up in your hands
Violated privacy
Nightmare-ish reality
Communtication fails
Some sick, disgusting fate
Vulnerable secret
You just won't understand
Author notes
Real-Life
About something that happened to me not long ago.
Please tell me what you think
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A quite intense piece you've got there
I like it - write on -
"Leaning over the edge
lost in kaliediscope thoughts"
Wonderful imagery.
This is a great piece.
I hope you feel better.
I'm glad it could be turned into a good poem.
Nice job. :] <3 -
Wonderful
Very provoking and really captures the readers attention.
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I like it! It makes the readers know how you felt. With powerful dips and turns, it really got the point across. Keep up the great work, japan!
~*~Dawn~*~
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good write i liked it alot.
i felt emotion in your words.
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wow i like this a lot. i love it...confusion and sadness don't go to well together..but awesome write keep it up
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Wow, this is... well, to tell you the truth, I can't really find a word to describe how great this is. I felt the emotion through your words. Loved how you broke the sentences too. That added a really nice effect/flow. =)
Great job sweetie... Sorry something happen to make you feel this way...
God Bless,
Butterfly
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