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Listen to me before I go!!
You didn’t think I would be here today, did you?
To stand up and throw it in your face
All these years you stole from me
Leaving me behind, confused and hiding
Feel nothing…

Look at me before you judge!!
I tell you nothing, that’s my choice
The only right not taken from me
Or did you forget to take that too?
The day you ruined my life, me…
Feel nothing…

Think about me and my wasted life!!
You know what I am talking about
I don’t have to explain, do I??
This has to be enough for you
Judgement day will find you too
Feel everything…

When did this pain started to hurt?
That’s what I asked myself many times
although it doesn’t matter anymore
it crossed my mind a lot
Looking at myself to see nobody
Feel nothing…

The last time I will fight this battle
I saved these pills for many years
to bring the tranquillity I long for
I can swallow them with this pain
The only way to find me back
Feel everything…

 

 

 

 



 

Author notes

Okay...three times must do it ...if not...Wolf Mistress will just leave in silence...

*gigolo*

This is part two in this contest of three parts..

This time it's for real..
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3189462

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A contest entry

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  • WolfHeart
    December 25, 2007

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    Vivid

    Your words wrapped themselves around my soul. These thoughts could have been mine, as the circumstances of our lives seem so close. I felt every sentence and got goosebumps of empathy. This is a really fine poem and I am honored to have read it.

    Wolfie


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    August 2, 2007

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    What an intense poem. So well written. Many lines in here that speak volumes. Brilliant write. Congratulations on the shiny. Well done my friend.

    Jeannie


  • Ethereal One gold member
    July 31, 2007

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    powerful and sad

    wow..........this is such a powerful poem. Feeling as though you life has been wasted, is such a sad thing. I think there are people that get pleasure out of destroying the lives and emotions of others.

    Great expression my friend!

    Ethereal One


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    July 30, 2007

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    My dear, after reading this, I wanted to cry too. But as a survivor, I wish no one to cry for me, nor feel pity, but to know that because of the hell I have endured, I am a stronger person. And that you are hun.
    I will cry WITH you, when you need.

    Storm


  • Beating gold member
    July 15, 2007

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    "When did this pain started to hurt?
    That’s what I asked myself many times"
    I have asked that too. It's a hateful feeling. I really like how strong this is, yet at the same time it's really sad. Nearly made me cry!

  • Eulb kcalB
    July 3, 2007

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    excellent excellent , you almost made me cry and I am at the library girl...have mercy!

    wonderful I have so felt this way...

    love it every line of this piece!

    • Wolf Mistress silver member
      July 3, 2007
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      Don't cry my lovely friend...It's just a poem.In real life people are kind and loving to eachother they would never abuse you...or was it just in my dreams...
      Oh you see, I am getting all confused now


  • fathom me
    July 3, 2007

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    Dont know what to say..
    The poem is really good

    • Wolf Mistress silver member
      July 3, 2007
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      Thank you so much...the not knowing what to say comment is probably one of the best you can get...it means it made you speechless


  • SoftlyScreaming
    July 2, 2007

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    very well written.. this is what i wanted... thank you, you are the first one that went by the rules so far..


    • Wolf Mistress silver member
      July 3, 2007
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      aaahhhh thank you...I am glad you think it is good. It took me some pain in the head but hey now I am here


  • The Poetic Angel
    July 2, 2007
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    great use of the title and good luck in the contest xxx cheeky xxx


  • Ephiphany
    July 2, 2007

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    Hey....

    I lied this sis...Look at me before you judge!! Is all that, congratulations in advance on ur winnings
    Piff

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