I see a boy the age of three
He loves to come and play with me
Doorknobs! Bedposts! Bookshelves tall
There's nowhere toddlers cannot crawl
I see a boy the age of five
A wonder that he's still alive
He swallows everything he sees
And paints my walls with expertise
I see a boy the age of ten
He makes me laugh now and again
Thinks girls are icky, plays in mud
And doesn't mind a little blood
And when his thirteenth year began
He's started to become a man
With pubic hairs and three-piece suits
And all the girls in hot pursuit
Now a man of sixteen years
And being pressured by his peers
He writes to let his feelings out
Dispel all thoughts of fear and doubt
He's met a girl he really likes
Because he's found they think alike
I have a message here from love
She knows what he's been thinking of
His stacks of paper fill my floor
And lists of rhymes pervade the door
For he's a writer, tried and true
I sit back and enjoy the view
Author notes
The growth of a writer from the viewpoint of the room in which he grew up. Only for me (because I've moved so much), it has been several rooms.
A contest entry
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1000 points, ended July 17, 2007, 34 entries
Honorable mention
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This is so... I don't know! The progression is amazing and very well put. You have such a talent Jacob... I envy it sometimes!!
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I've been meaning to tell you- I sincerely believe you have the potential to be a professional writer. Me, I just write to get it all out, but YOU, you write to inspire.
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wow!!! amazingly put from the point of view of the wall. I loved the process. Excellent work.
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This is just great. It captures charm and embraces her tightly. It has an elegance that stops it from being "cute". The rhyme and flow were great and it kept my attention. Thank you for this entry.
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Outstanding.
I can't see this not winning something. It has the whole story and the layout is outstanding. Good luck on the contest. -
I love this. I really do. The walls have eyes. What a great idea. Truly an amazing write.
One thing though. In the line:
"She know's what he's been thinking of"
It it should be "knows" and not "know's".
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I love this. I've been trying to come up with something for this contest, but it's proving to be harder for me than I thought. My mind sort of escapes when I'm writing, and I don't really pay attention to what goes on.
<33 Christine
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Wow this is amazing--good luck int he contest
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haha....very good rite
well spoken and great meaning!!!
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this is really good, i really love it. most truely great! ^^ goood luck in the contest, although you don't need much luck because this is amazing!
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