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Eternal Change

rushing quickly to the shore
hiding silky sand
wandering why do we explore
footsteps washed from the strand

foam of sliver hastening in
collapsing on the shore
here such beauty does begin
as our spirits start to soar

rocks that stately stand
beneath the ardent waves
daily becoming sand
thoughts of themselves to save

gently grinding down
flushed out to sea
causing sparkles all around
simply wanting to be free

 

waves that rush forever

into eclipse of time

say you'll leave me never

forsaken in my prime

 

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  • piccola silver member
    July 25, 2007

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    This is beautiful though I had a hard time reading it...I don't know if it's the font size or color (maybe my eyes) But it is really lovely and I thank you for the entry.


  • thelordreigns gold member
    July 6, 2007

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    Beautiful and lovely

    This is a beautiful piece of poetry. The imagery, alliteration, and rhyme are excellent.

    The "rocks that stately stand/ beneath the ardent waves/ daily becoming sand/ thoughts of themselves to save" - this is such a wonderful metaphor for our lives.

    Thank you so much for honoring my contest with this beautiful poem.

    Love and hugs - joanne


  • Samplette gold member
    July 2, 2007

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    I could read your poetic words all day long. There are a certain people here at allpoetry who have such a graceful way of writing, and you are definitely one of them. Best wishes to you in the contest.
    Sam