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Decisions

When choice, once clear, uncertain grows,
when confidence is in the throes
of conflict as the hands of fate
turn counter-clockwise, retrograde,
decisions must be made.

As lost hands may not be replayed
act, don’t delay, and fears may fade,
so plan ahead, anticipate
life’s pattern to its ebbs and flows
key in, diverting current woes.

When doubt, once abstract, shadows throws
to dim the spirit’s inner flows,
the mind must not procrastinate,
though expectations seem betrayed
where visibility has greyed.

Decisions must in time be made.
Tomorrow's no safe barricade !
As rates of Change accelerate
Chance cannot, even if it chose,
avert Time’s arrows, flighty b[l]ows.

No door remains forever closed.
Internal or external foes
undermine the strongest state.
Initiative displayed
may turn the sharpest blade.

Decisions, if delayed,
beyond all reason Reason trade
for self-destruction, - taken late
may compromise, harm, or foreclose
free choice, voice suffocate.

____

Doubt

To doubt too often deeper doubts succeed,
upon itself it’s self perversely feeds,
sad skeins, dyed grey or black, back interbreed,
and darkly hung, strung cloud mind wrung.  Foul weed
whose sole success seems self-destructive need,
whose cancers cluster, to both breasts accede.
Nor church, nor sect, nor rosary, nor bead,
successfully may ever intercede
to shrug such shackles, make dark doubts recede
unless the mind lets aching heart re[a]d bleed,
and heed pain’s flow, outgrowing grief, concede
that stress-free sojourn can’t be guaranteed...


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  • fennywest
    May 10

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    Winner


    Congratulation!
    You are the winner of the contest scoring a total of 77 out of 105. I have made my judgement on the following criteria below. Your poem was very apt to the theme I envisaged, hence you scored maximum points for your title and the theme. Your rhythm was also very consistent. Your metering was between 7 and 8. Your rhyme scheme was AABBB, BBCDD etc and could be improved. You painted some pictures with your ‘arrow, clockwise, blade’ which is very good. You were disciplined to maintain your structure of five lines per stanza, but the metering was not consistent. Your poem was very thought provoking and didactic. You reinforced the theme as you went along, which is very good; and finished with a powerful statement.
    Well done!

    1. title aptness 10
    2. theme Decision- 15 theme synchronism (r)
    3. rhythm 9
    4. structure ( 5lines) 6
    5. rhyme pattern 7
    6. metering 6
    7. imagery- metaphor, similes, symbols 5
    8. opening & closing – good use of repletion to end 7
    9. Language –repetition 5
    10. typo, gram, punctuation 7

    . Rewarded 8

    • Rhyme schemes and Timed schemes

      With respect : the rhyme scheme is AABCC CCBAA AABCC CCBAA except for the last two lines which finish BA on purpose.

      Best regards Jonathan
  • nifian
    July 2, 2007

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    wow hehe, i loved it mainly because of its originality!
    I love the form and structure you used in this poem, making sentences short, yet with an amazing use of words, rhyming and rhythm.
    though im not sure about the repetition of the word reason here:
    "Decisions, if delayed,
    beyond all reason Reason trade
    for self destruction, - taken late"

    but amazing poem


  • Night Hope gold member
    July 2, 2007
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    "when confidence is in the throes
    of conflict as the hands of fate
    turn counter-clockwise"

    I always liked the saying, "No decision is still a decision", my Friend. A wondrous elaboration on the tendency to procrastinate the inevitable...Good luck in the contest, Scribe... Wanda

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