Helplessly Shattered
Blood dripping through
The cracks among the glass
I lie here alone
Broken in the rain
Love has pierced
This heart again
Drowning me in crimson sorrow
Reaching out
For the touch of your hand
To pull me from this storm
So I may walk on my own
Two feet
Once more.
Here I crumble
Upon the floor
Giving up now
But this time
Its for real.
Caving in to temptation
As my life slips out beneath me
I crumble to the ground
I am peacefully broken
Locked away inside myself
Forever safe and sound
Author notes
This one i wrote a little over a month ago...
A contest entry
- ♥ Blackend Love ♥ by stop a bullet.
385 points, ended August 5, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Stunning,
You made me cry,
actual tears are running down my face,
I love it
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I really liked the emotion that you put into your writing. You did a really nice job with the flow, and just the overall feel of it. I could feel your pain in almost every line, i really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for entering and Good Luck!
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Beautiful. This is something different. My favourite line: "Drowning me in crimson sorrow" - good imagery through use of colour.
Please keep writing!
Ellie.
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T.H.I.S.......................W.A.S...........................................F.U.K.I.N...........A.M.A.Z.I.N.G.!....................(sorry but thats all i can say im speechless) -
I like this alot. Very sad, and when you're hurt you do want to curl up in yourself and hide away. Nice write.
♥
whisper
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