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Third Wheel

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Third Wheel

She is always on his mind and he loves her so
So here’s a relationship that can not grow
I see the problem; I must give him his space
She is constantly being, rubbed in my face

I don’t want to leave without a trace
But I want him happy in any case
She’s also a friend, I love her too
So I’ll back off; what else can I do

I promised him, I’d always be true
We had a life for the chosen few
It was fun to be his cyber wife
But now it’s affecting his real life

A constant reminder that cuts like a knife
He loves her much deeper and causes us strife
I’m not here to hurt him, I want him to know
She is always on his mind and he loves her so

 

 

 

 

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Tet Zayin Sonnet

A new Sonnet Form with a strict structure it does not have to be iambic. It has 16 lines or four quatrains.
Rhyme Scheme: Aabb bbcc ccdd ddaA
S1=11: syllables,
S2=9: syllables
S3=9” syllables
S4 =11: syllables
last line is the same as first.

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  • Swan song gold member
    July 8, 2007
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    Wow a new form that rocks I like the poem very good and will be back to read again


  • blueyez
    July 3, 2007

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    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwws I love this! Beautifully sad ! And I tried the form I love u!
    Peace and Love


  • Dalaney gold member
    July 2, 2007
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    you are loved...
    you are loved...
    you are loved...
    you are loved...

    Lane


  • PerVirtuous
    July 2, 2007

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    Cloudburst
     
    Snaking through random tears
     
    There!                                                    .
    .                            ...and There!
     
    Sharp curses in the darkness on dark
    Fleeting vivid victories of brilliance
    Illuminating storm battered landscapes
     
    Stretched into reverent memory
    By the bone-rattling feel
    Of its monstrous song
     
    Explitives expressed
    In seemingly savage rage
    Released into
    Tremors of soft satisfied echoes 
     
    And dreams of sunshine
     
    accompanied by three bunnies! 
     
     
     
     


    • Amera gold member
      July 2, 2007

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      This was not meant to piss you off. It was meant to give you room to breathe. It was meant to open the door for her. It was meant to say I love you no matter what.


      • PerVirtuous
        July 2, 2007
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        In no way am I pissed off. There are always going to be storms. We weather them and life goes on. I know what you meant.


  • RedAquarius
    July 2, 2007

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    Oh my, I agree with Can't-touch-this, very sad and I can relate so easily, having had a similiar relationship in the past.


  • Cant-touch-this
    July 2, 2007

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    Please pass the tissues, tears flowing from this heart. This is so very sweet and painfully sad to read...To give the wings to the one you love so they can fly and be happy with another...is the sign of true love This is so beautifulThank you for sharing it

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