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The Proof of Meeting

I stand here and stare at you,
Our first meeting is here,
I watch you now, you are so still,
Down my cheek rolls a single tear,
I sit down beside you,
On the dew-wet grass,
I look down at you,
Our meeting at last,
I reach out to touch you,
My hands hit smooth stone,
I open my eyes now,
And I know I'm alone,
I turn away from my scene,
And feel my eyes fill,
I never got to meet you,
And now I never will,
I open my mouth to speak,
But no sound comes out,
I want to tell you how I feel,
Will you hear me if I shout?
There's no words to describe,
This emptiness I feel,
But at least now I have the proof,
To know that you were real,
I stand up slowly,
And now I turn to leave,
I wish it wasn't too late
Now in you I believe,
I look back at your grave,
And from my lips escapes a sigh,
I wish I had met you once,
Before you had to die.

Author notes

love happens once in a lifetime. the difference lies in how many time you're willing to live in the time that you're alive.
Option 8
Sadness
Option 2: "Can You Feel Her Burnin' Through Your Veins, She Will Always Live Forever"

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  • Electric Sunrise gold member
    December 7, 2007

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    Hey there, firstly allow me to apologise for the late judgement of this contest,

    I loved this, excellent read, emotive, powerful, and yet simple for all it evokes it doesnt employ any major techniques to do it, i love works like that. A theme i know all too well, probably another reason i enjoyed it so much

    Thanks for the entry, best of luck in the contest to you


  • xxlisajazminexx
    October 4, 2007

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    awesome write!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    definately going in my final list!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    beautifully written and with such heartwhrenching sadness.........
    wow.......
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    Thank You SOOOOOOOOOOOO much for entering this wonderful & beautiful piece into My contest!!!!!!!!!!!!

    best wishes...... and much MUCH love !!!!!!!!!

    good luck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • MagazinesFall
    August 4, 2007

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    This is a sad poem, but I liked it. The only thing I didn't really like was how many times the word 'you' and 'i' were used, but sometimes that's unavoidable- and I know I've written many poems just like that.
    Thanks for the comment on my poem 'I miss you'
    I really appreciated it and am sorry it took me so long to comment yours!


  • Whisper Trinity
    July 20, 2007
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    ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥

    Very sad. I really like this poem its very touching.

    I reach out to touch you,
    My hands hit smooth stone,

    I look back at your grave,
    And from my lips escapes a sigh,
    I wish I had met you once,
    Before you had to die.

    Those parts are the most powerful to me. Great write && Good luck!!!

    Blessed Be♥♥


  • eyes2see-wrds2speak
    July 2, 2007

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    you're kidding right?

    your poems do not suck(imagin this is underlined) this is brilliant...i had no idea that the person was dead untill i read "My hands hit smooth stone"...great write!


    • Ilma
      July 2, 2007
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      I am my harshest critic
      And thank you lol =]


  • dixiebme
    July 2, 2007

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    awesome! I love the flow and they way you led up to the fact that this love of yours is dead. Excellent write. I wish you an award in this contest you deserve it.

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