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If Choice is Choice



Intense the sense of pattern which the mind
Never ceases weaving as the Way
Advances over Time and rhyme to find
Meaning's meanings simple, sure, yet fey.
Ideas, ideals, freethinking underlined,
No superficiality where they
Allow free range - as spirit well designed
Marks space to place wor[l]d catalysts which may -
If choice is choice not circumstance designed -
New windows open through which interplay
Another, and another insight wind
Make constant progress through syllabic play.
Infinite, hope's opportunities
Now tendrils touch, much scope soul further frees

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Palimpsest acrostic IN AM I IN AM I IN AM I AM I IN

pic pattern crochet
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  • Xqzt
    May 5
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    Intersecting webs....hola

  • Unca Goat gold member
    July 10, 2007

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    A very complex write that can develop meaning on so many different levels. The description itself of a person as a spiritual being with the conflicts inherent of living in this day in time is breathtaking.
    One thing you may want to be aware of though, in an anonymous contest, all author info is hidden from the contest host, which is why I asked for the info in the comments.

  • crimsondew silver member
    July 2, 2007
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    A very unique way of personifying religion.. well done. All the best!

  • chugglepuff
    July 2, 2007
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    The rhyming within the lines really makes you focus on what's being said. Complex, wonderful imagery, some of the metaphor was a bit tricky for my poor brain But then that's not your fault. An original look at religion, best of luck in the contest! By the way, you didn't put your name in your author notes, I think you're meant to

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    • Jonathan ROBIN gold member
      July 2, 2007
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      Reply to chugglepuff

      Where the need for explicit arguments in favour of a given point of view falls into a "conversion" mindset, this often accompanies narrowminded and or dogmatic standpoints ... the emotional crutch of organized religion is all too often used as an intellectual escape hatch or an emotional whipping post.

      Where one's name appears both as pseudo and also in the copyright information it appears sufficient and if held out of court then so be it


      • chugglepuff
        July 2, 2007
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        Oops, sorry, I really need to wake up :S And thanks for making things clear for me! I've got a severe case of stupidity at the moment...

  • Room without doors silver member
    July 2, 2007

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    Outstanding

    Another intricate, thoughtful poem with a sense of searching for ideals and spirituality and gaining insight with experience. Your poetry has a sense of depth and is always original. Impressive. Best of luck in the contest.

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  • Night Hope gold member
    July 2, 2007
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    "Infinite, hope's opportunities
    as tendrils touch, much scope soul further frees ..."

    Ahhh, dear Scribe...You're singin' my song... This is a wondrous penning, my Friend...You always seem to convert me, Sweetie...to whichever the cause...unless I'm already right there with ya...Good luck in the contest... Wanda

    . Rewarded 6

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