My Love,
This secrecy denies me,
I'm struggling to swear it.
My passion is so uncontrolled-
I can't bear it.
I hate that I love you,
I love how I hate you.
My heart should be pounding
the way a heart's made to.
Your smile unhinges me,
your comments annoy me.
Your constant affection
will only destroy me.
Your boldness is blissful,
you lips- I adore.
Kissing them would kill me-
but still I'd want more.
When we're not together,
I secretly cry.
I want to be with you
and I don't know why.
These feelings will end
on account of my death.
Unless you can stop me
by getting out of my head.
I'll never forget you,
so don't even try.
If you love me back,
then don't say good-bye.
Yours truly,
Ann-Elaine
I read this on the eve of her timed suicide.
I rushed to her house- when I got there, I cried.
But it wasn't because I hadn't made it in time,
I saw her come close, but she's still alive.
Her wrists were raw and dried up in scabs.
The sorrow had hit me in powerful stabs.
I bent to relieve her-unconscious, she was.
It hurt me in ways that love usually does.
She awoke in the hospital, angry for living,
but thens he was thankful for the love I was giving.
Today we are lovers and soon to be wed.
I'd kill myself too if I knew she was dead.
Author notes
This has nothing to do with me or my life. I've just been a bustin' with stories to write poetry about. I thought this was an amazing idea.
A contest entry
- Just Me...And You... by FlipperSwitch.
600 points, ended September 8, 2007, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh really? A second read for you it is! Love you!
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I must admit to slight confusion but none-the-less I enjoyed the read. It had love and fear all wrapped in anticipation- a good poem, thank you.
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Woopsie! I keep doing that! Never mind! It's a second read for you missy! Love you!
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Very strange...
...idea, but it works out very well, a tale of dying for love but with a happy ending. Very good flow and rhyme, well done. WASP.
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Your boldness is blissful,
you lips- I adore.
Kissing them would kill me-
but still I'd want more.
She awoke in the hospital, angry for living,
but thens he was thankful for the love I was giving.
Today we are lovers and soon to be wed.
I'd kill myself too if I knew she was dead.
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HOLY FUCK BALLS! THIS IS AN AWESOME FUCKING POEM BABY! you had me going there until the end! I thought he came and she died! I was so scared and angry and sad all at once! Now they're getting married! awww! this is beautiful baby! I love it and I love you too! ha ha rhyme! KISS
Jenn
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EXCELLENT
most excellent!!! you really had me going there until i read your notes at the end very good indeed!!! -
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well thank you. I think this is one of my best ones yet! thanks for the comment!
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