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Birth of a Raindrop

Birth of a Raindrop

I knew He was sad and I could not stay long
With His love behind me I was pushed along
I knew it was wrong and I did not know why
I am only a tear that comes from His eye

So blessed to know our God in the sky
Frightening to know that our God can cry
I fell from a lash onto His cheek
Left marks on His skin just a small streak

He cries for the poor and for the meek
He cries for those, who don’t stop to seek
He cries for those, who turn him away
Fell from his cheek, I left him that day

So I fell through the clouds and the sky so grey
I fell with the others a shower bouquet
As a raindrop I fell to where I belong
I knew He was sad and I could not stay long

 

 

 

Author notes

Instead of dedicating a poem to a friend; I dedicate this form to her. Raven’s favorite number is 16.


Tet Zayin Sonnet

A new Sonnet Form with a strict structure it does not have to be iambic. It has 16 lines or four quatrains.
Rhyme Scheme: Aabb bbcc ccdd ddaA
S1=11: syllables,
S2=9: syllables
S3=9” syllables
S4 =11: syllables
last line is the same as first.

The Tet Zayin Sonnet was created by Amera M. Andersen. Tet Zayin is the Hebrew number 16.

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  • creationsfromheart
    August 5, 2008

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    I had to come read this one again, I do think this is one of my very favorite of your spiritual writes, I jsut love this! Have to book mark this one I came in serch of it today

  • creationsfromheart
    May 7, 2008
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    I love this AMera and the form is wonderful. your rhyme is perfected and the words flow with ease and grace, awwwww so true we are many times just a tear in his eye staining the cheek wonderful write!


  • Forrest
    January 18, 2008

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    Wow. This is great. The rhythm is dead on and the imagery is beautiful. Excellent job.
    Peace, Forrest.


  • Swan song gold member
    October 28, 2007
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    This was wonderfully sad A tear. Men do cry don't they?
    I love this form well done dear?


  • Laura
    July 9, 2007

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    ohhh wow i had to keep going back to the author notes to understand the form hehehe coz we all know how good at form i am well done this is flaming amazing xxx


  • Lauren Alexandra
    July 2, 2007

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    So powerful the tears are flowing!

    This is a moving power of grand power. You can feel the pain that brought on this raindrop. Its movement through each stanza touches the soul and we cry within. The form for this sonnet is brilliant and makes the poem flow like a tear down your cheek.

    "He cries for the poor and for the meek
    He cries for those, who don’t stop to seek
    He cries for those, who turn him away
    Fell from his cheek, I left him that day"

    So moving this stanza - you feel so close to one who feels and sense all.

    Thank you for sharing your sweet gifts with us all.

    Love,

    Lauren


  • RedAquarius
    July 2, 2007

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    "shower bouquet" - just love that imagery! What a lovely concept you've presented, I never thought of personifying a raindrop in this way!


  • Cant-touch-this
    July 2, 2007

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    O' Amera this is just lovely my sweet sister:He cries for the poor and for the meek He cries for those, who turn away from him Fell from his cheek, I left him that day...This brings a tear to my eyes and a pain to the heart...You sure have a gift with words!


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    July 2, 2007

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    This is so very beautiful and well written! It brought a tear to my eyes and a sadness to the heart...You are such a wonderful writer my sweet one*hug*As a raindrop I fell to where I belong I knew he was sad and I  could not stay long:f:f:f:f:f:f Thank you for sharing your beautiful heart*hug*


    • Amera gold member
      July 2, 2007

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      Thank you Tender Wolf. Your comments always give me encouragement.


      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • StarEyes
    July 2, 2007

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    Miss Form Queen herself, This is amazing!!! What a great job you did on this one!! I love the rhyme scheme in this one! I am not very good at rhyming but this is fantastic! Best of luck in this contest!!

    and much love

    Nyetta


  • cherche -d -ame
    July 2, 2007

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    thank you so much for this entry into my contest. I admire anyone who can accomplish what seems to me a very complicated form and it seems as if you are one of those. As soon as I get a chance I will check out more on this form [I always like learning about them , even though I have not yet had the time to really practice any but a few]. However I am impressed by the way the rhyme seems to fall so flawlessly and the entire piece rolls off the tongue very easily. BTW, I stink at rhyme as well , but I can definitely appreciate a good one Thank you again and best wishes,
    reenie


  • Desire gold member
    July 1, 2007

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    Gorgeous!!

    This is beyond Precious!
    Gorgeous verse You have penned Form Queen
    Touches to the core~
    leaves a stain on Spirit

    Loved this and the presentation!
    Wow!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Whoochi gold member
    July 1, 2007

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    Dollface, amazingly beautiful and has brought me to tears, I have cried for the love I have found in my Creator and when I discovered that I was worthy and that he actually wanted me, well, tears spilled upon my cheeks...this is extravagant in its message and of course the Form splenid..... Good luck.....if i had 10 bunnies they would go to this lovely sonnet,


  • PerVirtuous
    July 1, 2007

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    I love this. Interesting form and wonderful image. You are on fire!! I am always so pleased to see you put yourself into these forms. They are sheer joy.


  • PoetsAngel
    July 1, 2007

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    ALL HAIL THE QUEEN!!!

    I have to say, this has completely floored me! The beauty in your words has made me cry, it's been quite a while since a poem has had an effect of this magnitude on me...I can't wait to try this form, it's just perfect...I really am lost for words to adequately describe how beautiful you write. The rhyme sequence is genius. I will bookmark this one, so I can read over and over and over

    Love
    Cathy
    xxxx


  • katscradle
    July 1, 2007

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    EXCELLENT PIECE

    LOOKS TO HARD FOR ME TO LEARN JUST YET,
    THIS PIECE WAS BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN WITH
    A WONDERFUL MESSAGE

    GOOD LUCK WITH THE CONTEST!!

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