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Why is it so hard to fly?
To let go
And leave all cares behind?
A glass cage keeps me here
Looking
Wanting
…But can’t grasp
My aspirations kill me
In this prison
Want turns to envy
And I wallow in great misery
Why can’t I be that?
Because I refuse to leave
This self-pity pen
When the door was opened long ago

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  • Irish-Maiden
    October 9, 2007

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    This is very good write, and i love that you put a GLASS cage. though i feel it could go a little bit more descriptive of what this world/cage is like. But the sorrow can be felt in this.

    GOOD LUCK IN MY CONTEST!!!


  • Ithica silver member
    October 9, 2007

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    Wow! I really liked this poem. I loved it's brevity but it packed a powerful punch. No mincing words here. Excellent job with the imagery of our "self-pity pens" for we all get stuck there now and again... Ithica


  • Inverted-Hearts
    July 2, 2007
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    *nods in agreement* Love ya Hannah!


  • MoonlightBeam
    July 1, 2007
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    wow, this is deep I'm here for you always love ya

    • Cyprien
      July 1, 2007
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      Thank you, and I'm glad you are here for me.


      • MoonlightBeam
        July 1, 2007
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        your welcome, no problem ur like my best friend and I hate to see u hurt or angry

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