life
turns on a
dime.
alive now
gone in
a nano-second.
no great
mystery
disease kills
we all
know that.
but aren't
we glad
in the
face of
it
there are
always
precious
moments,
kisses and
hugs
from loved
ones.
they may
come
briefly, too.
filled with
the love
of life
the love that
never
ceases
comforting
those
left
behind.
Thank God
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Comments
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Excellent
A very fine, essentially a Bare Bones write, with excellent imagery. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
Love love love the format.
This is great. I love the title, and the last line was perfect.
You couldn't have picked out a better ending.
Wonderful write. -
Here one minute and gone the next. How true is that? The moments in between are so precious. Thanks for sharing this! And good luck in my contest! -Liz
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Yes we should all thank God for the little things in life.
Like a hug, that is really priceless.
The love of a love one means more than anyhting.
This is a very nice piece. A joy to read.
Good luck n the contest.
Justgot2loveme
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A very warming and loving way of thinking positively. thankyou for sharing it. -elena
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alive now
gone in
a nano-second.
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Your poem is just
SO ALIVE
on this webpage.
Dancing around,
flirting with the links
and marketed texts.
I loved this write!
Thanks for entering. Good luck.
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A reminder to thank God for all the good things He does, instead of just blaming Him for the bad. Thanks, this was lovely.
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I really love this poem, it speaks of such truth. you did a great job on writing this. thank you for sharing this with me.
good luck in the contest.
kat
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this is very deep
and very filled with love and compassion
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Well this really summed up the reality of life.. Here today gone tomorrow.... I really enjoyed the layout you chose as well. Great job and thank you for sharing this.
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i ely liked it and you made sense had gr8 flow and evreything
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I loved it
i liked the way each line was so short. like life. i loved it
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Loved the style made one contemplate the words which had a very deep meaning to them. Well done.
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Lovely
I really liked this. It had a very staccato feel to it, which really fit the idea of life being brief. Its also a peaceful read, which is something I sort of needed today.
Honestly, I could not have read a a better, more fitting poem for my life at the very moment. Thank you.
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really good
i really like the way the extra short lines lines make you read it in a disjointed way a very good write -
this brought about happy thoughts, and an easing of heavy feelings. very nice aside from the spacing, which is difficult for me to keep up with (my eyes are baaad!) lovely poem
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i thought it was very very good. ~ hdb.
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sweet...
For the readers sake don't space every other word like that.
I thought it was a very sweet poem and I drew deep meaning from it once i was able edit so that I could read it.
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nice
It was short and sweet things we take for granted and shouldn't. I can feel the regret as if there was something unsaid or undone that the writer wanted to convey a warning to others not to go down that same road.
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very good
i like the scheme
word by word
because of the complexity of your write
meaning, imagery, reality, life, time
word by word
each word bears a special meaning
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It was a relief to read something short and simple. My eyes were hurting from all the 100 liners. It was pretty good, I loved the form and your message!
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i really like it
tho whole 1-2 words per line gets kinda hard to read online because you have to scroll but other wise its very nice -
i like the short lines it allowed me to read it quicker and flowed nicely. there were a little to many periods for my taste tho, but other than that, i think it was nicely put.
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but aren't
we glad
in the
face of
it
there are
always
precious
moments.
my favorite part of this....very very nice. I love the way it was written...not the usual stanza forma -
"there are
always
precious
moments.
kisses and
hugs
from loved
ones." - Very Good
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in contrast to the previous comment, i really like the common periods. it causes the reader to take breaks and really think about the things talked about in the piece. also, how after Thank God there is no punctuation, symbolizing that the phrase continues forever. and that it is capitalized is neat, too. :]
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Liked the brevity of the lines, but not sure of all the periods - seem to stop the flow of the piece. Some new thoughts begin with capitals after the period, other's don't. Nice ending.
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