forgotten baggage
crouches on curb;
weather carves
heavy wrinkles.
briefcase man
with faceless fingers
reaches through
shadows;
never quite touches.
In a list
A contest entry
- A QUICK ONE 10-15-20 Pay Forward by ten thousand cicadas.
300 points, ended July 1, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite contest [Gold trophy winners only] by Tangled Angle.
400 points, ended July 21, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments are most welcome.
Comments
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Ah yes, very fine lines that tell the story so well!
You reached inside the face of homelessness with such skill! 
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Short, but stellar. I can see why this one gold. Great job, best of luck in the contest.
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oh, wow, this is amazing! The comparisons between forgotten baggage and a homeless man is simply superbly done, even within so few words. The description is amazing.
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Oh such imagery here of two souls different yet alike
Great job and lovely write.
Becky
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i LOVE THIS!!! the two would seem so different upon first glance, huh? but really they are in similar predicaments, and likely, similar spirits. excellent
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This is beautiful, you wove an amazing piece here. Good luck.
Chelsea
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