I dreamed
I was a child
in a garden
laughing
beautifully.
I dreamed
I was flower
in that garden
whispering
softly.
I dreamed
I was a petal
on that flower
relaxing
easily.
I dreamed
I was the stem
of that flower
growing
slowly.
I dreamed
I was a mother
with my child
watching her pick flowers
happily.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Windsparks by meanderingbear.
750 points, ended July 8, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Do you have what it takes by Improv Machinery.
400 points, ended July 5, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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nicely done. i can see a mother and child in a lush garden in my head when i read this. you captured the essence of that flower perfectly. great write and good luck in the contest.
Rob -
This is really beautiful. I love the imagery. Hope you do well in the contest.
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Oh my, how lovely and sweet! What a great entry! Thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
Carolyn
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Simple and Thoughtful
"I dreamed" is a good way to start a stanza. This poem makes me happy in an uncomplicated way. Children and flowers are good subjects for a poem, and you have capitalized on those subjects well.
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