At twilight I knew
The dark was so blue
Sitting in his lap
We were taking a nap
My head on his chest
That felt nice against my breast
We kissed so sweet
Under the moonlight heat
A mist was at large
But only love was in charge
The stars a new twilight
My eyes reflecting the starry light
He ran his hand down my body
In a caress as his hobby
The moonlight our only display
Running to the barn to play in the hay
A breathe I take while hand in hand
He used to be part of the country band
My first love I found that night
In this country twilight . . .
Author notes
This poem is about a memory of me and my boyfriend, Brian when we first went out. I went to his house and we hanged out on the colonels porch next door and had a little romance. It brings back more good times with a twist of our country upbringing to a romance for this piece.
A contest entry
- My first contest!!! by achilleslove.
900 points, ended July 2, 2007, 20 entries
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Beautiful. Simply beautiful. It's so romantic and sweet. I loved every line.
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i love you sweet-pea
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You know . .
This ones 4 us, me amor. Me and coderre forever to anyone who reads this poem!!! smile always ya all. -
Remind me . . .
Later to not be so hard on you. -
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reminder
you told me to remind you to not be so hard on me, uh even your worst of days arnt really that bad
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yea!!!
words cant discribe how good this piece made me feel im back o line for a breff second sorry no access at my house please call me alagator food
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AWW! So sweet! And there is so much emotion in ths poem. I can tell that it came from the heart. I loved it. So inocent, yet so ... I dont know how to explaine it lol. Just saying that I really did love this poem.
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I love this poem. Filled with so much emotion. Well done!
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I love the country touches that this had. I grew up across from a cow pasture next to a cornfield, so this definitely made me smile! This was very sweet and you told the story of your evening so well. The rhyme seemed just a little forced, but the overall flow was good. Thanks so much for entering!
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