Lips parted like luscious ruby petals
You leave desire on my tongue
Two Sunday dresses tangled on the floor
Midnight sheets glazed in sweat
You taste sweeter then vanilla
As it passes between your parted thighs
Leaving me even more thirsty
We are a realm of flesh and curves
Unexplored by each other's curiosity
Fingers gliding, moans melting
He could never match your touch
Feline eyes surveying every inch
The softness of their penetration is rattling
Enticed by bitten lips, teasing
Our heartbeats entwine
Climax of a snowflake beauty
Author notes
I'm not a lesbian or even bi... maybe a little bicurious. I actually wrote this for a story I've been poking at for awhile.
This is about a first time by the way.
I hope that it's still okay for your contest!
Good luck judging!
♥
A contest entry
- Lesbian Erotica -- There Needs To Be More!!! by Sesheta.
700 points, ended September 14, 2007, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very tastefully done, and it does portray a first-time experience. Lovely imagery, the words flow well and is a nice read.
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"Two Sunday dresses tangled on the floor"
I love that line the most =]
I hope you win
I love you! ♥
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Seems like a dance to me. A dance of love and lust for two women. very nicely done, and very classy. You never say exzactly what they are doing, but you describe it enough that anyone can guess. Good work!
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This is classy erotic, I liked it
You got the first time feel perfect about it
It really came across as that, though it wasn't embarasing, just beautiful
I liked the way you explored the feeling of curiosity, becasue it can influence such a thing as this
And can turn to so much more I'm sure
I'm interested in this story, though I'm straight as far as I know
I liked it when you used the "two Sunday dresses" line
It made me think of good girls being very naughty
Well done, I actually loved this
I love you too my lovely
All my love
♥
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tastefully erotic, this is classy... although i'm not a fan of such, i found this to be very well written, and i think you are on to something! keep it up!
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this is beautiful x
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thanks honeykins
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I could go on at length about the excellent word choice and wonderful descriptive quality. I could discuss the enticing sensuality of this piece, the raw desire. I could even talk about my own bi-curiousity, or my favorite line (stanza three, line four). But instead, I think I'm going to take a cold shower.
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lol
have fun working some of that steam off
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I loved this. It's just.. wow.
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lol
thanks
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Damn, this is hot, and it is also written very tastefully. Excellent job!
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thank you
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The last line is gorgeous beyond words, wow.
"We are a realm of flesh and curves"
--loving this line as well. I'm definitely curious, I gotta experiment sometime. Anyway, this line is really sensual and very feminine. I agree with a reader below that it's not tacky in the least, and I find a lot of erotic or erotic-inspired poetry to be, so kudos for that. This is not about love, this is about two people experimenting of course, that's what I got from it.
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lol yeah I know, a lot of erotic poems are really cheesy... it's annoying!
xoxo
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Wow!!
Holy Mother of Pearl Jam
What a Powerful piece You have penned busy bee!
Love this and the images are like
Whoa!!!!
Woooooooooo hooooooooooooo
You go on with Your bad self
Oy!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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AHAHAHA!
not only do you write awesome poetry, but you give awesome comments!
lots of love -
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Des is a multi-tasker of awesomeness that way
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I totally agree with you doll
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Steamy
Great poem is this. I found it very erotic and beutifully written so it felt artistic and not cheap and tacky. You also make good use of the visuals here, and chose the right words to evoke emotions in this piece. I feel like I was almost there watching by the sidelines. Ever think about a career in erotic writing? LOL! Great job and a pleasure to read.
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LOL thank you very much for the comment!
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