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Poem: freshest write out for you

Wisdom, is something hard to find
Yet it listens closely upon a rind
The peel of an orange the skin of me
But what is wisdom what can it be?

Knowledge, is something we all crave
But what is knowledge, do we all save
Our minds for knowledge, or do we all
Ignore the wisdom, so we all fall

With one of these the others not
Apart of life as we forgot
That wisdom listens yet knowledge speaks
So combine these and the power leaks
But both can still be attained.

Comment: Interesting write, to bring this through

I have to say this is quite rare
The rhymings hard but I'm not fair
I hate my work but never say
For many like it like break of day
The flow feels weak, and lack of power
The words used, like a simple flower
However this poem creates a simple thought
Towards the reader, the mind has brought
A moment of understanding in a world of chaos
A interesting write to say least
So good luck in the contest

Author notes

Option E e4: You probably thought that you wouldnt get a entry in this category so i thought i would at least try. That was a weird option lol to write a comment about a poem in the format of a poem but i think i have managed it. this is the first time i have wrote the poem too, so both parts are brand new so i hope you like this as i'm not to sure about either the poem or the comment lol

Please do not say who i am for the benefit of the contest, many thanks

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Comments

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  • Laura
    September 8, 2007

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    omg this is brilliant wow im so glad to see that you got a gold for this one as it deserved only a gold xxx


  • Kimojuno
    July 12, 2007

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    Great!

    "Knowledge, is something we all crave
    But what is knowledge, do we all save
    Our minds for knowledge, or do we all
    Ignore the wisdom, so we all fall"

    Perfectly written, great job, and thank you for entering.

    "That wisdom listens yet knowledge speaks
    So combine these and the power leaks" :C

  • Poco Loco
    July 3, 2007

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    Lol. Very philisophical! I liked it. The style was dudey too and very unique! In places the rhyme was a bit forced but on the whole i thought it was rather good!
    Good Luck!

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