Eyes to catch the lint of life
collected so vividly in the heart's jar.
Bits and pieces of hues, sights, sounds and smells
gathered when the day is born.
Weaving them into a verse quilt
to drape across the soul with threads of hope
till it warms
the chill of shadows
and one finds a flame
for shining into tomorrow.
Serenity silky textures seduces from the garment
silently hushing the clamor of stress ghosts.
Inhaling the burnished glow of the muse's candle
as only a mind's quill can feel,
turning the fleeting scenic litter
into an artistry of thought.
Hanging upon a clothesline of creativity
where others came to admire the laundry.
It all overflows in the precious euphoria
of sweet and savory
scavenger morns,
only felt though the seeping and succulent swirls
in visionary strokes
from one's sensory paintbrush.
A contest entry
- This Isn't What You Think!!!! by Heavenly Angel.
475 points, ended July 3, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow!
I am so very speechless after reading this. It flowed so nicely and kept me till the very end. Awesome poetry you have penned here dripping off of the page like honey and waiting to be licked from the fingers for a sweet delight. It is that yummy...My favorite parts are:
Weaving them into a verse quilt
to drape across the soul with threads of hope
till it warms
the chill of shadows
Awesome lines...just breathless!
Keep penning fine poet
Becky
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment.
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This is another one of your pieces, where you truly capture the attention of the reader with just the first line of the poem.
I like the duality of the constant metaphors [fire, and cloth] in addition to the other gorgeous images you put into the piece. They all work well with each other, and the allegory is well placed in the poem, without becoming tedious.
The first stanza really stand out to me, especially those first four lines. For me, it expresses so much how things and instances can impact us on a daily basis.
The overall message of the work is brilliant beyond belief. The way poets, and writers in general, can paint such a vivid and emotional scene with their words, is a wonderful concept, that I don't think gets written about enough. The writing becomes even better when others can enjoy it and get something out of it.
This is a work with perfection in all three stanzas. Innovative in its tone and imagery; wonderfully structured and worded, this poem seems well thought out. Gorgeous piece.
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Sorry it took so long for me to get to your comment. I always cherish your faithfulness to such incredible detail. You are such a master at gifted probes into any poems. Thank you for the beautiful words.
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Sigh... your words paint a beautiful picture. I loved this. Flowed so nicely. it was over before I knew. it
Great Job
Delila
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Thank you so much for the great comment.
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What a beautiful read this is!!! The images you painted with your words, just beautiful and serene. What a great job! Best of luck in this contest!!
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Thank you so much for the great comment.
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A truly awesome piece, my dear friend; one of the very best I've ever seen from your pen!
Gorgeous
Thank you so much for sharing this and for being a part of the contest...awesome -
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Thank you so much for the great comment.
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