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Killing Cats

The vampire bats are out to fly
They're up, and ready to suck you dry
I'm following them down the road,
Setting off bombs just to watch them explode

I watch it like a movie screen
'Cause I'm that sick and twisted teen
Who's playing life like just a game
'Cause no one likes what's just the same

In the carnaval of monstrosity,
My name is Curiousity
Maybe I like to watch you rot
I might enjoy it, I might not
Maybe I like our little chats
Or maybe I'm just killing cats

You ask me "is it real?"--- of course.
You're my entertainment source
Intensions may be cold as frost;
A promise with the fingers crossed

You wanna see me? Here we are.
My mind can wander pretty far
You found it and stepped in it's way
Now you're my fun-to-watch display

In the carnaval of monstrosity,
They call me Curiousity
Maybe I want to watch you rot
I might like it, I might not
Do you enjoy our little chats?
I think I'm only killing cats

Author notes

July 1st, 2007.... Ever heard the saying "curiosity killed the cat"?.... that's what this poem is based off of. It's about this crazy bitch my ex was two-timing me with... at first she wanted to kill me, and now she has a crush on me and wants to date me... no joke... So I decided to make friends because... why not? I just wanna see what will happen... I'm curious and killing cats.

5. This would be the "other" option.

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Comments

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  • Nam
    August 25, 2007
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    "Intensions may be cold as frost;" - "Intensions" I think you mean "Intentions". Though "Intensions" is a word, I do not believe the definitions that go with that word are what you're meaning, and if they are: it doesn't make too much sense going with the line above, and below.

    "You found it and stepped in it's way" - "it's" would be "its".


  • Jenana
    July 30, 2007

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    ....metaphor maybe?? dude...what is this?? nowhere in my options did it say bizarre. heh. not that its not good. its good for crazy. just not going to win my contest. sorry.

  • Alyx Cosnahan
    July 12, 2007

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    Nice poem. I loved the rhyming. And I had to make those lines long because the contest could only allow 35 lines. And if I did it in original form it would have been 37 or something like that

  • Thrilla N9nna 503
    July 11, 2007

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    magnificent work dear poet!! this was amazing, i loved it, and the rhyme scheme was flawless, it just blew me away, good luck and thanks for entering!

  • DeathDolly
    July 7, 2007

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    This is pretty interesting. Made me think a little. I love the repeating parts.
    Good job && good luck.
  • SilentMind
    July 7, 2007

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    wow..I really like the inspiration behind this poem as well as the form - rhyming and how you vary the number of lines for this paragraph:

    In the carnaval of monstrosity,
    They call me Curiousity
    Maybe I want to watch you rot
    I might like it, I might not
    Do you enjoy our little chats?
    I think I'm only killing cats

    that paragraph was also my favourite. But it's all brilliant so well done




  • DeepDarkDesire
    July 7, 2007
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    Beautiful play on words

    There's so much depth, so much flow...this poem is fucking brilliant! There's nothing wrong with this poem, it's not just text book perfect, it's poetically perfect. Your word usage is amazing and I think no one could put it better. To start off with the title interested me but I didn't expect a poem this great. Well done and welcome to the finalists.

  • The Lady
    July 4, 2007
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    this is different i must say....

    I thank you so very much for sharing it with me....

    I am sorry for not a longer comment for my eyes are a little blurred this morning and it is prombly my sugar level....

    but as i said thank you for letting me read this write too...


  • WindsAngel
    July 3, 2007

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    I really liked the way this poem flowed and the rhythm of it. And it is a different take on the phrase that is actually very good. The only line that I kind of tripped over was the last line in the first stanza.
    "We're setting off bombs just to watch them explode"
    It fit, but it didn't because it was a little too long. It was one of those lines I had to read over again to fit the rhythm and it just broke the poem up slightly. And I am pretty sure that "carnaval" is spelled "carnival". But other than that: Awesome
    In the carnaval of monstrosity,
    They call me Curiousity
    Maybe I want to watch you rot
    I might like it, I might not
    Do you enjoy our little chats?
    I think I'm only killing cats

    Wonderful write,
    ~WindsAngel~

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