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States of breaking

you look at me
in all seriousness
and you tell me
you will never lie to me.
i take this as a gift
not seeing
how your honesty
can hurt me.

you reach for those
who are shattered
compassion glowing
in eyes hungry
to save
salvage
and a thrill
sweeps down your spine
even as your heart wrenches

your eyes are so fixed
on the shattered ones
that you do not notice
when i crack
and only need
a little support
to return to wholeness

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  • Dame Culottee
    September 7, 2007

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    My favorite part of this poem is: "You eyes are so fixed on the shattered ones that you do no notice when I crack" - Good god, they're so focused on the past relationships sometimes that they don't see that they're following the same pattern that ended the past relationships. It's sad. You are a very gifted writer, you add imagery to the imagination, and provoke thought out of the reader. I really enjoy it. Keep it up

    ~A