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Red Again. (tanka)








your parting letter
faded with time
red again
the riverside
maple

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Andrew Hide

 

01/07/2007 

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  • Tony El Great silver member
    September 14, 2007

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    You can sure read a lot into the word red, I wrote a whole poem on that color; really liked the way this poem worked that color (LOL) out.

  • eternal-devotion
    September 13, 2007

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    interesting.

    My first impression is that there should be more to this. emotionally I can see someone rereading a love letter over and over under a spreading Maple tree, in the fall. this is not awkward, and nothing should be changed. all of this is my favorite. The title works well with this. The first line aand the last line begin and end this up in the right way. All though short this was good.


  • Emerald13
    July 2, 2007

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    lovely pivot ! ... highly stealable ... wonderful play on words ... and it continues with the line breaks ... love the use of 'riverside' as part of that crafting ... so nicely done ... >>> gina