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An ant another ant can’t pass
without enquiry ever,
antennae act as looking glass -
formic fact from fiction sever.

Alas lad, lass, to pretty pass
may come when they’re together -
roles played perpetuate a farce,
cant cant can’t answer, clever.

(S)he who each day seeks fresher grass,
makes hay while sun shines, never
forgetting often most bypass
commitments whatsoever.

Let telepathic tendrils touch,
test out best nest expecting much ...

 

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  • C.I.M.A Punk
    August 19

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    This one belongs in an ant-hology for real.
    The alliteration is great and the rhyming is great.
    Like ants, you've worked very hard on this poem.

    Great job!

    . Rewarded 4

  • Clovis6790Curious silver member
    June 14

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    Superb

    Maybe we humans ought to touch more, perhaps, it would improve our communication. Verly well written my friend.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Lost Vampyre Angel Greeters member
    June 13

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    this is such an amazing poem hun,
    i love the structure and form of the poem,
    it just blew me away, your a brilliant writer,
    my favourite part was:


    (S)he who each day seeks fresher grass,
    makes hay while sun shines, never
    forgetting often most bypass
    commitments whatsoever.

    Let telepathic tendrils touch,
    test out best nest expecting much ...

    it is just amazing,all the best,
    love kitty xxx

  • LoverBoy4u
    June 6

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    An ant another ant can’t pass
    without enquiry ever,
    antennae act as looking glass -
    formic fact from fiction sever.

    Alas lad, lass, to pretty pass
    may come when they’re together -
    roles played perpetuate a farce,
    cant cant can’t answer, clever.

    (S)he who each day seeks fresher grass,
    makes hay while sun shines, never
    forgetting often most bypass
    commitments whatsoever.

    Let telepathic tendrils touch,
    test out best nest expecting much ...


    from the starting to the ending its great

  • Kelly2h
    June 6

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    first of all the name is great

    second of all i have enjoyed it
    because of the great writing

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    An ant another ant can’t pass
    without enquiry ever,
    antennae act as looking glass -
    formic fact from fiction sever.

    Alas lad, lass, to pretty pass
    may come when they’re together -
    roles played perpetuate a farce,
    cant cant can’t answer, clever.

    (S)he who each day seeks fresher grass,
    makes hay while sun shines, never
    forgetting often most bypass
    commitments whatsoever.

    Let telepathic tendrils touch,
    test out best nest expecting much ...

  • Melissa Burns
    April 18

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    I had to read this one again, but I really kind of liked it. I don't know, I guess because it's so different Ants are really scary though - so I almost cried some got in my grape cool aide when I was little and I didn't see them and I took a HUGE drink before I realized it - UGH! ... Thanks for being stand in therapy lol - anyways good poem!

  • daviscth silver member
    April 16

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    I really enjoyed reading this. I read it a few times actually and it made more sense each time, if that makes any sense. LOL Thaks so much for posting.

  • Broken Angel Shade gold member
    April 14

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    Very nice write. It showed good imagination and good flow. I liked the rhyme it made the rythm well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. I have seen some of your toher works but never commented before guess I will have to start
  • robtex silver member
    March 30
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    that is neat very creative/observant


  • One Angry Monkey
    March 29

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    If i wrote that i would be hoping for comments on the flayful tone and incesant rhyming, which is what i'm giving you. it's fun, light hearted and enjoyable. the free rhymes crammed against the end rhymes make for a very fast paced piece which takes a second or third reading but which is rewarding for those who do. two posible things i would like to point out are that although politically correct, the "(S)he" takes a litle away from the flow on the first reading becuse the reder stops to wonder what you mean, and also line 8 could perhaps be written
    "can't can't ever answer clever". just to throw in an added rhyming element.
    thanks for the read.

    . Rewarded 8


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    March 28

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    The scenario is beautifully depicted and the treatment of the subject is quite interesting..you did a wonderful job..and thanks for sharing it..

  • silica silver member
    September 4, 2007

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    I too like the sound of words – may euphony transcend meaning…. But even should the mark missed – it still sounds great for reading.

    A shame so many poets here write stuff that is far better than it sounds…


  • AshleighAddict
    July 15, 2007

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    To be honest, I'm not a fan of humourous poetry, and that's what you labelled it. So let's see as I read.

    ...Sonnet? Weird... but so catchy. I'm loving the flow. I can get past the subect matter, hah. Your style is amazing.

    Wonderful.
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