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Make Love to Me...

Make Love to Me...

Make love to me with your pen,
your words making me sway
as they circle my head
and their music seduces my soul.

 

Won't you be gentle with me,
for promises hidden in poetry
are enticing yet brutal
when phrases are so beautifully written.

 

I've tasted your words,
passionate and sweet as nectar,
and my weary heart begs of you
to touch me tenderly and kindly
as you lure me to your bed of verse,
tenderly carrying me away with eloquence.

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  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    April 9

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    Gorgeous write! I absolutely LOVE the way you showed the double-edged sword of love in poetry - it can be so exquisite, yet so disappointig.

    I can see why you won gold!


    • pattyann4500
      April 14
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      Thank you so much for your lovely and kind comment on "Make Love to Me." This is one of my favorites. Hugs, Patricia


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 10, 2007

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    Just, WOW!

    This is why I am here. To read such beauty warms my soul and brings me to feel again.
    Thank you for sharing this verse of splendor.
    Buddy

    • pattyann4500
      July 10, 2007
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      Wow! Thank you, Buddy. I so appreciate the warmth and kindness of your comment. You're so genuine. Hugs, Patricia


  • Bedroom Eyes
    July 3, 2007

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    WELL DONE PATTY!!!

    Glorious write seeped in metaphor and oozing with the essence of what makes poets special This piece is definitely worthy of the gold

    Congratulations!

    • pattyann4500
      July 10, 2007
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      Oops! I just saw this. Thank you so much, my dear friend. It was certainly not my intention to miss your comment. You're very sweet, and I'm glad you enjoyed this. Hugs, Patricia


  • Griswold
    July 2, 2007
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    Oppppss

    Forgot the bunnies


  • Griswold
    July 2, 2007

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    Beautifully metaphorically seductive write, very well done indeed, best of luck in the contest..Scott


  • leo2
    July 2, 2007

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    I never met-a-phors I didn't like. And these are seductively symbolic of the ultimate goal of love poetry. If only I could turn my passion into progress I'd be cooking with gas and not sleeping alone...lol. Beautiful words from a beautiful lady. Best of luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

    • pattyann4500
      July 2, 2007
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      You, my sweet Leo, are one of the few who really get my metaphors. I guess I must be doing something wrong.

      Thank you, dear friend, and you should never sleep alone.


  • Whoochi gold member
    July 1, 2007

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    Absolutely breath-taking are your words that gace this page...exquisite words that a re richly filled with such romantic notion, emotion...is this not what many think as they tiptoe through others poetry gardens yet to be filled by such words that soothe and stroke their being....ty for capturing such feelings...well done...GL!

    • pattyann4500
      July 1, 2007
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      Thank you so much. You are too kind. I wanted so badly to write something worthy of the written word of poetry, and I usually fall so short of the glory it deserves. It is much like a gentle lover that leaves one wanting more. Hugs, Patricia


  • imperfectperfection
    July 1, 2007

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    Brilliant

    Patty this is definitely this isn't what you think!!! Brilliantly used words that sway the reader to your victory with eloquence. This is a beautifully written poetry that comes as a winter breeze bringing the warmth of summer...this is what poetry does & can do to a reader specially the one that is written from the depths of your heart just like this one. This is sure a winner to me. I'm so glad I know an accomplished writer as you... thank you... take care Minoo

    • pattyann4500
      July 1, 2007
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      Aww, thank you, Minoo. You're very sweet and kind with your comment. I'm very blessed with friends like you. Hugs, Patricia


  • Sherry gold member
    July 1, 2007

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    Wow Patty remarkable poetry and beautifully done
    in taste. Never thought of poetry as making love
    before but intresting and cleaver poetry does show passion if its about love between a man and woman. Amazing and I like how you crafted this lovely!


    • pattyann4500
      July 1, 2007
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      Thanks, Mom. I'm glad you liked this one. I believe it will be my favorite for awhile. Hugs, Patricia


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    July 1, 2007

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    This is such a beautiful piece. I love to read your poetry. This is an awesome read.


    • pattyann4500
      July 1, 2007
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      Thank you so much for your kind comment. I really enjoyed writing this. Hugs, Patricia


  • zochit2me gold member
    July 1, 2007

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    First let me say, I love the back ground you have and second, you have penned a breath taking piece here. Wonderfully written and presented to us with tender heart felt feelings. This is brilliant..no other way to put it.
    Thank you for sharing this and best of luck to you.
    Becky

    • pattyann4500
      July 1, 2007
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      Thank you for your sweet comment. I haven't written much in a long time, and my first few since my return were not so great. I wanted this one to be good. I think I succeeded. Hugs, Patricia


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    July 1, 2007

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    Absolutely a breathtaking piece of poetry
    Wow! I'm just speechless at the quality of work I've just read
    Thank you so much for entering this and for being a part of this contest; I'm honored that you joined!

    • pattyann4500
      July 1, 2007
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      Thank you, Tammy. I have been looking at some of the 'quickies,' and I find you to have been right. I wrote this one several times, because I didn't want it to be one of those quickies that stuck in another's mind because it was terrible. I'm glad you hold to such high standards. I just hope I stood up to them. Hugs, Patricia


  • goddesskevauna
    July 1, 2007

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    Oh that is so beautiful! Such sweet and loving words penned so well! Words that touch to the core! ~sigh~


    • pattyann4500
      July 1, 2007
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      Thank you, Sweetie. Your words are kind and cherished. Hugs, Patricia


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    July 1, 2007

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    Simply exquisite my dear friend.

    Passionate to the core of every word.

    yes, you may lay your head upon my pillow

    soft words to comfort your soul

    sheets of softest satin

    to warm you as you strole

    through dreams of lovers wishes

    in the lines I write for you

    you know how much they mean to me

    when I lay them here for you

    to capture all your feelings

    and emotions running free

    when in my arms I'll hold you

    Dear Sister, I love thee.

    • pattyann4500
      July 1, 2007
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      Aww, Mikey, your comment is the sweetest I believe I've ever had. Thank you. You and your eloquent words could make a girl's heart melt. Hugs, Sis

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