My Heart Cries But Yet I Smile,
Such A Mixture Of Feelings Its Driving Me Crazy Inside,
The Thoughts Of What Have Been Brings The Notion Of Calmness And Happness In Motion,
While The Thoughts Of What Could Have Been Brings Fort Uncertainty And Unawareness,
WoW What A Sensation As The The Heart Beats The Drums Of War For Love,
Battling The Spirits Foundation Of Insecurity For Love,
Don't Lose Hope Cling On To What You Hold Dear,
Fight For What The Heart Desire,
Everything Is Not Worth Fighting For,
But There isn't A More Righteous Fight Then The Fight You Fight For Love
Please tell me what you think i am new at this stuff
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Good write.. Love, is very intense.. Im going through a lot of things right now and this poem I can really relate to. Its one of the best emotions someone can feel and truely is something to fight for.. Nice work, keep writing
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i love everything about your hard working write dear except i didnt agree with the way you spelled ... Fort i would prefer are suggest forth but its your call ~ the red book of love ~
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Nicely said and very true
I really enjoyed this and you wrote with great emotion. You don't need to start every word in caps though.
Keep writing, reading and commenting!
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Thanks I Corrected It For Other Reader Thanks Again For The Advic
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you need a better layout for this; its great but really hard to read and follow, just a ream of words. the erpeated 'for love' is really strong but it would come across so much easier with better formating, i really had to look for the line breaks, even though when you're into this its really obvious where they should be
so yeah, spread this out into lines and make me really happy , basically
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