Coveted medals,
finally glowing on chests,
Were they worth all the labour?
The wails, tears
weigh more than the gold.
Author notes
20 words for- glory's tragedy'
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- Quickie, 15 minutes, 10 entries, 20 Words. Beat The Clock! by Cupcrazy.
450 points, ended July 1, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - treasure chest for quickie prewrites by DancingRed.
300 points, ended July 9, 2007, 32 entries
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Liked this take on glory's tragedy. So many medals - are they worth all the trouble and anguish one goes through to get them? Easy to read and understand.
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Amazingly powerful; your words tell a story and fill the page with mountains of emotion. I love the ending, for it is so true that tears weigh more than gold... Awesome poem.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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it is true the life was not worth the medals
but they gave their life for something even if the medals are all that is left, it is lie trying at least they tried beter than to have never tried at all. Someone may say I amd proud of him for what they did a poor trade but he did leave something to show. our deeds may be all that we have in live to show we have been there. -
very sensitive ...
a great take on the prompt ...
good luck,
maa
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Beautiful take on the prompt. Loved it. thanks for your fine entry. Hugs, Bunny
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Quickie, 15 minutes, 10 entries, 20 Words. Beat The Clock!
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Your Prompt is: "Glory's Tragedy"
they lie in graves
cold and silent
buried deep by intention
weighted down with
medals of gold
do they regret
or still yearn
to Revere ride
through black of night
with silvern voices
rallying to the cries
This is an excerpt from a poem of mine, use it and the title as your prompt, it will give you an idea of what I am looking for
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