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The Aurora Borealis

I sit by a pool of liquid sky

My reflection wrinkles as the wind whispers by

My rock sails across the water

  A skipping, bouncing rambler

Yet amidst all this peace something seems awry

Ripples start and distort the sky

 

Across the sky a rich beam slashes

The vibrant light waves and flashes

The azure sky across it dances

Its free spirit sways and glances

  As the starry sky twinkling sashes

The northern lights waltzing romances

 

This beauty untamed renders

The world mealy textures

A moving picture on a starry canvas

All the world breathless, pious

This Goddess holds beauties and wonders

She is the Aurora Borealis

 

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  • Virgoan silver member
    September 2, 2007
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    My favorite lines:

    The azure sky across it dances
    Its free spirit sways and glances
    As the starry sky twinkling sashes
    The northern lights waltzing romances

    Beautiful images and serene.

    Thanks so much for participating in my contest. I wish you all the best. I encourage you to keep on writing my friend.

    >>>VIRGOAN


  • azure85 gold member
    July 12, 2007
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    This is a wonderful use of the picture, your descriptions and images are great.

    This beauty untamed renders
    The world mealy textures
    A moving picture on a starry canvas
    All the world breathless, pious
    This Goddess holds beauties and wonders
    She is the Aurora Borealis

    Excellent writing, thank you so much for your entry.


  • acqua
    July 1, 2007

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    Lovely Imagery, beautiful piece, it brings one along to see! Good Luck in the contest and all the best~


    • Elegant Inspirer
      July 2, 2007
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      Thank you. Its always nice to hear that your work is appreciated. It is especially nice for this particular poem because I don't write rhyming poems; and I am not all that confident in my work in the rhyming area so your confident really helped me. Thank you.
      Elli


  • Wonderland-Crumpets
    July 1, 2007

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    This had a really nice flow to it, and the imagery was excellent! This was very refreshing to read thanks!


    • Elegant Inspirer
      July 1, 2007
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      Thank you for your comment. I don't think im all that great at rhyming poetry and i swore it off months ago and decided to try it again. I have sworn it off again but thank you for your comments and compliments.
      Elli

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