'Fix Me' I scream
can you do that for me?
i'm pointing out my flaws
so everyone can see
'Help Me' I yell
can you be there when i'm down?
i'm done hiding behind a smile
when all i can do is frown
'Be There' I say
Promise me you will never leave
when i pour out my heart to you
and leave it displayed on my sleeve
'Save Me' I whisper
I'm slowly dying inside
please be my sanctuary
-my haven in which to hide
'Love Me' I silently mouth
because I know you never will
not when i'm this way
and my emotions over-spill
In a list
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This is an awsome poem. I love how you talk the one you love, it's a great poem.
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Thank you for the comment. Now, if only they would listen.
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This is an awsome poem. I love how you talk the one you love, it's a great poem.
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Wow, it seems like the more I read your poems, the more I can relate..scary in a way, but good too. Your a good writer, you show emotions well, people understand your feelings and thoughts as soon as they read your poems, you write them out very nicely. Great job.
Kaitlyn
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Thank you, that means a lot to me. The other site I posted my poems on was getting hardly any feedback, so I was afraid I really sucked or something. Thank you for all the nice comments
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I love the subtle repetition,you show alot of feeling in this poem without trying to hard.
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Thank you so much for your comment. It meant a lot to me =]
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