somebody save me from my hart
before i fall in love with you
i see the way you walk
i hear the way you talk
with your Brest between my lips
i moan as your hand slides down my hips
and as i feed form the challis of your legs
i hear you breath
your hand finds my Brest
you grope and i desist
you play along my legs
and i cry as you enter me
its over now, we'v sinned
but as i hold you i feel safe
we kiss once more, and entwined
in one another we sleep
two women one bed
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snickerdoodles
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i like the end, way to make a wrap
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wow!!! that was GREAT!! i'm all for gay pride and i completely support the decision of two ppl from the same sex in bed together! thank you sooo much!! i really enjoyed this. keep writing and good luck!
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niceee. true story?
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This was a hott piece.Thank you for following the rules and Goodluck.
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the title itself says it all and the beautiful inspiring words win my admiration to this one.
i love the flow and imagery behind this.. its magnificently written with deep view. Inshort i admire this piece of work, cos its a great one.. ..u did it amazingly, great job!!
I look forward to read more of your work and do take a look at mine too, u might like it..
Thanks, love,
Mansoor
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welcome to ap
despite the typo errors which should be spell checked this was a nice piece. some imagery was more powerful and creative than the other lines like "and as i feed form the challis of your legs
i hear you breath" that was great. a subtle, pretty, erotic poem.
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Sexy
I'm not a big fan of the word "sexy," but that's what this poem is. I love the eroticism of it and some of the ways you express things. The last line finalizes the poem well. I just notice a lot of spelling errors, which is something that's difficult for me to get past. -
bee-e-a- U-te-ful
what a great write so much passion you have a way with words!
*~*bee*~*
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