Have you noticed lady
That you make men sweat
One look at your legs
And their armpits get wet
Their hearts beat so fast
That they lose control
Their money is yours
Along with their soul
And deep in the night
When passions are great
They'll tell you most anything
And not hesitate
To beg, steal or borrow
To keep you at home
With knowledge that someday
Those legs may just roam
And then they will wallow
Alone in their bed
With one round in chamber
Destination... the head
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- Torture Me With Talent (Only Those On My Favorites) by delightfulmess.
450 points, ended July 14, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What is it? by Poetess12.
600 points, ended May 18, 2008, 4 entries
Honorable mention
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600 points, ended August 30, 2008, 34 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I can see why you got HM for this is hot i am in sweat for not the shower is cold for those whose legs never cross the path in the bed they arose.
well penned Bob for your words speak volumes on a mans song told hugs always Angel♥
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hmm an unsual poem to be sure thank you for entering this I liked the rhyme.
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Well rhymed, and sadly true, beneath the humor..
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funny and i love it
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Wow, a pair of legs to die for,eh?
Very clever and humorous!
It's amazing how some women have that kind of power over men,and just with legs. It baffles me and I'm a woman. lol
Too bad he had to die.
I enjoyed this read for sure.
-Mandi
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Brilliant
Very clever as usual Bob
You had me giggling at this one but then..... bang, you hit the punch line I should have seen it coming!!
Cherry
xxx
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hm
i aint got nothin to say...why don't you just rub it in my face..hahaha rub it in my face...oh forget it
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it speaks so much truth
I liked this one it truly puts into perspective the power some women have over men. Very well done
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wow
i love this poem!!!!sensual,laughter,truth....
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I liked this poem it was really good and very true (lol)
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Bookmarked for future smiles, dunno why the applauds didn't take...Oh well, I can fix that!
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Delightful! Now the ending is just a wee tad....serious. But it's all in good fun. Like the rhyme and message. Remember we women have half the money and all the....legs
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congratulations on the hms. No one should be wiling to die over a pair of pretty legs. I go to the beach every weekend and see so many beautiful legs ... seen one pair you've seen them all.
thank you for entering
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I have this friend who always gets compliments on her legs. She laughs and has no idea why guys always talk about her "dang legs!" I think she would appreciate this poem with wicked pleasure...
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Interesting poem Bob. Obsession...and when the obsession walks from our lives, we suddenly don't know how to live without it.
This has many layers, and underneath it all, very sad and lonely.
~E.
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Beth
actually I love a good pair of legs & am not afraid to say so. I also admire a women that cares for herself & is honest about her needs & emotions. I have known a few women in my life
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I like the flow of the rhyme in your poem.
Keep up the great work and thanks for your entry.
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hehe
wow the power women have over men
lol
awesomeness bob
thank you for sharing
keep up the great work
KITTY
P.S.
it did make me smile
alot
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hehehe.... ahhh the power of the legs over men... lol
This was brilliant Bob!
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Jackie
If women only knew the power of a great pair of gams . For theylead to a treasure
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Mmm
I think that underneath this humor, is a heart tainted
by the whole scenario of this clever piece of poetry.
Whether its real or not.
Are we really that magnetic
Hugs x
x
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Very good, well done. Sounds like a tormented heart there somewhere! Kindest thoughts....
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Clever and boy did I need a reason to smile! Even the last paragraph is hilarious. Snappy pace, good rhyme and rapier wit. I take it you're a leg man
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Hey thanks
And we all need to smile more often. Thanks for the read
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I just love your wit,
my clever friend, congrats on the HM
definitely worthy!
tho I would have liked to see gold
for this..
Love it! ~Pastel
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Wow. the rhyming was terrific, the emotional range of this poem was amazing. It was almost a contradiction of emotions, that wanting and love is equal to or leads to pain and death. It was a wonderful poem and it made me think. a very thought provoking piece.
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WOW!!!
An amazing poem, worthy of the gold, I say!!!
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Haha...I love it...it has great rhythm...and even a bit of great humour...
I've read it four times
But...
I'm still not sure who was the one who got shot in the head.
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lol
He did my friend
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Wow what a great poem I'm moved very nice I love the humor behind thisI think this will torture Delightfulmess.Your a great Poet
BRAVO!!!
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what a shame though - that some from the get go will focus on those gams.
I took this with the humor intended and found it certainly fit that category. You didn't miss a beat with the flow on this either.
nicely done with a light theme to get us smiling. (despite the shot-gun ending).
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wow`
a woman to die for?
a woman to kill for?
either way such bliss. LOL
intense and wonderful write
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very interesting
Very Interesting poem you have here I liked it alot and that is why you are one of my favs on here. -
Okay Then...............................
This was a really different and interesting piece!!! I mean I liked it alot. Your rhyme and meter were perfect!!It also had a twinge of humor to it as well. I am catching up on all the one's I've missed this week and I think next to the patriotic one I liked this one best!!! It brought a smile to my face and made me remember when the guys used to say similar things about my legs...aaaah those were the days....Great job again Bob!!!~~Toni~~
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A standing ovation is in order and quite appropriate.
This is remarkable...
You words create magic.
Always impressed, ~Pastel
(well wishes for the contest)
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this was a good write am sure the men enjoyed it as will lol never let the ink run dry
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great topic, good words and fine write. Good luck,
Buddy
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Wonderful Poem!!!
Hello Bob, As always you have penned a terrific poem. Sounds like you know how to treat a woman you care about. There is someone out there waiting for you. Loved your poem. A sad ending though!! You take care, Sandy
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~I *love* it ~
Women like this make me sick...I have nice sporty legs petit LOL
I loved this like I love everything you write.
I hope all my other friends see you and love you to.
thank you for entering my contest. I am one of your biggest fans Bravo 
and here is another
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To beg, steal or borrow To keep you at home...This is so cute and well written also...see you have entered a contest That is wonderful and good luck!
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