I see a photo on the counter,
a moment in time frozen.
Nothing to bring me back,
but I miss it with all my heart.
A tear created in gravity,
Falling to the floor showing weakness.
I wish to hold it still,
but it is impossible.
I looked back to the memory,
a smile over coming my face.
I don't look like that anymore,
not since you started to hurt me.
I look to the tears and my hand for the story,
a pause in my shaking limbs.
I tried to supress it,
but the tears are stronger than I am now.
I hurt you bad,
you hurt me worse.
Nothing became fixed from what I tried,
your mind frozen like the tundra.
I'm willing to forgive,
but the person who forgives?
No, it doesn't cross your mind,
I don't know why but it does.
I need what you gave before though,
a happy tone and mind to help.
But I ruined my chances,
I hate it.
If you can't tell,
i'm broken in two without what she gave.
Please help me find another,
someone to hold me when the winter is cold.
A contest entry
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Comments
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"but the tears are strong than I am now."
I believe when you use the word "strong" you actually mean "stronger", strong doesn't seem to make too much sense in the tense you're writing in.
Other than that: a good poem that you have written here.
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This is a very emotion piece of writing that brought a tear to my eye. The problem with it is that it does not rhyme and I requested poerty that rhymed. I am not going DQ you, I'm even contemplating putting you in the finalist as I did feel true emotions from this piece. An excellent write.
Good luck and thank you for entering.
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